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creation

Among the clouds
Beyond the land
lies something not created by man.
Free as a bird.
Flying so high
I think to myself I've finally arrived.
left that terrible world
far better up here.
The pain and wickedness all disapear.
PErched high above.
high on a cloud I let tears fall freely
I sigh they are missing something so easily
once again I fly away
realeased from my imprisonment my body.
To another place beyond the land.
It simply was not created by man

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  • nichtmich silver member
    October 24, 2008

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    A lovely vision of the afterlife. No pain, no regrets, only sympathy for those who cannot be with you. Beautifully told.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    October 23, 2008
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    Very nice. Thanks for entering my contest.
    Good luck to you.
    Brian


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    August 5, 2008
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    Your write is truly beautiful, sincere and touching. Very well done. Thanks for entering.