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Torn Hope

I take the smiles of others
and make them mine.
Tortured by a sweet desire of death.
I wait until I am strong enough to live again,
before letting go of the fear that
consumed me for so long.
Should've let the pain conquer me completly

cause now i can't escape the nightmare I live in.

All my fears turn to rage

as it grows colder as I forget who I am.

Hidden umong the ashes

I start to wonder why I couldn't hold on

to a shred of hope in my last seconds.

where did all the strength

of hidin gall my pain go?

Burning up in a hazy smoke,

I scream as I twist in my grave

searching for the back door out of life.

Torn between two sides of battle

both hoping for a victory.

Not wanting to cause people pain,

I surrender

letting go of reality and torn by hope,

I fade in to the darkness till

nothings left, 

but smoke... 

 

 

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  • AssumingRain
    August 6, 2008
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    i dont get what your shooting for yet the poem speaks to me in the heart.good work...


  • taintedsunshine
    August 6, 2008

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    The visual I got from this was excellent. "I scream as I twist in my grave" made me cringe.(Im afraid of being burried and of the dark).Its a really dreary piece and it was worth reading. Nice work.


  • Angelflower
    August 6, 2008

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    This was really interesting.. The emotion behind this was really intense.. You did a wonderful job.. I really enjoyed reading this thanks much for sharing

    Angel