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Until My Last Scream

My heart is weak from your chains
Scorching the flesh you used to hold
Without your love all that remains
Is a soul that's dead and cold

I refuse to waste my tears
On sinful words from lips I will always crave
Why won’t you save me from fears
That could break me down to my grave

When you know you can save
Why do you leave me writhing in pain
To your heart I will always be a slave
Even if your torment drives me insane
When you know you can redeem
Why do you leave me alone and afraid
I promise I’ll love you until my last scream

Your name is carved into my tomb
My lover and my killer in one soul
Like the rose we were beautiful in bloom
But now we decay beyond any gods control

And I don’t know how long I’ll survive
Without your addictive and beautiful rape
It stole my prayers which kept me alive
And all means to escape

When you know you can save
Why do you leave me writhing in pain
To your heart I will always be a slave
Even if your torment drives me insane
When you know you can redeem
Why do you leave me alone and afraid
I promise I’ll love you until my last scream

Until my last smile I worship
Until my last breath I will need
Until my last moment I will love you
Love you until my last scream

When you know you can save
Why do you leave me writhing in pain
To your heart I will always be a slave
Even if your torment drives me insane
When you know you can redeem
Why do you leave me alone and afraid
I promise I’ll love you until my last scream

Author notes

Dedicated to Pete
I fear that no matter what you do i will always love you with all of my heart, no matter how scarred or torn you make it



Yes there is references to rape and religion and stuff in here. But, as always, its just metaphorical. I.e. rape is emotional rape. god(s) is anyone who can help. ect

i dont want people getting upset over metaphors, its plain wrong, but i wont stop using them

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  • Turning-To-Dust
    October 8, 2008

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    As others have said this poem is certainly deep. I've read a few others who have also repeated their main stanza and it reminded me of a song. Your poem would make a lovely song, but even as a poem it is very beautiful. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    September 23, 2008

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    I like the obsessive quality of this work. The rather masochistic bend of it only adds to that. The beauty of caring so deeply about how someone feels towards you while knowing that they don't.
    good write


  • The Otep
    September 1, 2008
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    A tatse of dark and beauty= what a great combo!! Lovely and the lines flow greatly!


  • glitterydoom
    August 26, 2008

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    wow! dark and very beautiful. I really like the metaphors and I dont think they are very offensve at all, your just trying to get your point across
    thankyou for entering my contest and good luck


  • slippingofftheedge
    August 19, 2008
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    deep/dark
    eventually a new guy will come along that will make this nightmare go away

  • know one
    August 11, 2008
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    wow

    dark...I really like your use of meterphores,this is unique,great write and thanks for entering.


  • Meroza
    August 8, 2008

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    This is a bit, meh, not what I am looking for. It dosent really give me that dark feeling I am craving.
    But besides that, it is a nice -he dumped me- poem ^_^

  • celadia
    August 7, 2008

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    gee...this is impressive in the flowing language department and the imagery and emotion. I can't help feeling that you need help, though, slave? rape? as positives. Hopefully you are taking on a character. But truly impressive feeling to it.

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