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That Night

The same night this all happened,
I wanted to end it all!!
I couldn't take it,
I was like a toy being ragged around
I felt like a punch bag for you to take out your anger
I was so alone with nobody who could help

That night you told me
You no longer cared about me
And you wanted me gone
Because I have never been good enough

That night you
Pushed me down the stairs
I sobbed out my heart
And you just called me a wimp!

That night you stood
At my bedroom door
And watched her punch me
In the face
And you told me to not retaliate

That night I ran
As far as i could
Until you wanted me back in that hell hole!
To live like both your punch bags

Another night like that
Maybe I caould bare!
Maybe I am just a wimp
But I know you don't care

But you have done your worst
I might have even deserved the cracks!
And maybe ...
Just maybe I would go through that all again
Just to see my sister once again




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  • stargardt13
    August 30

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    This is such a sad poem! I feel terrible that you had to go through this. I am glad however that you got out and I hope that you continue to not be abused! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Violent Glass
    August 28
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    i know what this is like, the onl reason i didn't leave was because i couldn't leave my sister.... great write, thanks for sharing!


  • Little Lesley
    August 13

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    That was a brilliant piece of work! I agree with redone36 - no - one deserves to be treated this way! Thans for your time to enter "10 Options {Pre-writes aloud}"
    Wish you the best of luck!
    ♥~Little Lesley~♥


  • masked-monster
    July 31

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    This was very well done, it pulled at my heart. No one deserves to be treated this way, and Im so sorry you had to endure thisI hope things work out for you. Good luck in the contest.


  • Deprived-of-Reason
    July 31

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    Heart wrenching poem. This poem was filled with emotion and pain. I can relate to what you are saying and i think you told your story smoothy. It flowed nicely.
    Thank you so much for sharing
    and best of luck in the contest.
    Best Wishes,
    -kay

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 29

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    WOW. I really liked this. This made me sad to think about something like this happening. Great imagery and fantastic emotions. BRAVO! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • ever-wondering
    July 24

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    Thank you for entering.

    Great poem, but i find the topic unorigional. I know abuse prevention is a big thing, and i completly agree that abuse is wrong, but poems about it dont make me sad.


  • darkscorpia silver member
    July 15
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    I liked the last line.


  • Antebellum
    July 14

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    'I wanted to end it all!!
    I couldn't take it,
    I felt like a toy being ragged around
    I felt like a punch bag for you to take out your anger
    I felt so alone with nobody who could help'

    all of the 'i felt' Kind of brought this down.
    Its a really good write, but it needs varity here.
    thanks for entering,
    good luck.


  • ToxicBunny
    March 14

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    hectic, im sorry for anything and everything you've been through. I dont think it's stupid either, i love these last few lines
    "But you have done your worst
    I might have even deserved the cracks!
    And maybe ...
    Just maybe I would go through that all again
    Just to see my sister once again"
    very moving and deep


  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    March 7

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    no where near stupid
    its amazing
    you made me cry
    i loved it
    great job
    thankyou for entering my contest
    goodluck
    xXalyXx
    his emo teddybear

  • Violent Glass
    February 1

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    i don't think this is stupid,
    i know what you mean, i would've gone back for my sister too
    this is really good
    thanks for entering

  • lost.and.alone
    September 17, 2008
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    Thanks Solidfied x


  • Solidified
    August 24, 2008

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    Graphic and painful to read, envisioning you in such circumstances and remember something similar I've been through. Emotional pain is harder to take than physical right- but physical abuse just lets you know that a person is fucked up and doesn't deserve to be near you. I don't know the story behind this, but I'm glad you wrote about it. Writing is a great way to vent and to learn from life and to be able to move on and be happier. Post your other poem too!

    Nice write.

  • lost.and.alone
    August 6, 2008
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    Thanks for your comment chuck. And theres no need to be sorry, you wernt to know were you. xxx


  • broken-angel
    August 6, 2008

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    awww becky, i had no idea i knew u didint get on but had no idea that u were physically abused, am really sorry, i can understand now why u didnt answer your phone that night xxx great write xxx

  • lost.and.alone
    August 5, 2008
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    Aww thanks for your comment chuck. xx


  • AloneForever-
    August 5, 2008

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    this is a powerful poem...It's one of the few which could actually bring tears to my eyes..It has such emotion..I'm sorry for all what happened and is happening to you You're a great writer

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