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[ birdsong ]

birdsong
all the coolness gone
from my pillow

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  • Emerald13
    September 22

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    its lovely ...
    the warmth of ... awakening
    beautiful juxtapositioning and there is nothing obvious here ... its something that trickles down - like that warm realisation as birdsong infiltrates awakening ... so nice >>> Gina

  • abu nuwas
    June 4
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    Did not get

    I know about the coolness gone from pillow. Someone should invent self-freshening pillows. I would never feel that way in the morning, unless I were ill and confined to bed. Perhaps the writer lives somewhere in the tropics where the birds make a great racket at night. I think probably it is a description of waking up, but no, did not truly get.