This silent visage demonstrates not chagrin,
though weary days curl under anonymous.
These thoughts are herded by cupid first slowly,
then in pause between irregular heartbeats,
take on meteoritic effect quickly.
And even shadows become somewhat soothing,
while veins are bent toward the impossible.
(Not that I am completely unassuming.)
It appears plagiarism of divine words,
to pen of things beautiful yet not achieved.
(Though I pride myself on blissful rebellion.)
Let us shatter distance and 'regulations';
mindful instead of this shared uncommon dream.
(We should scoff at the normal traversed vistas -
knowing that togetherness is no mere scheme.)
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4246355 - jasminerose
Cerulean
A contest entry
- My 350th contest Invite Only ...Group One by poet2angels.
800 points, ended August 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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LoL!!!
'visage'=kick-ass word
"herded by cupid"
Aww, a Lassie herding sheep!
Or not.
"irregular heartbeats,/take on meteoritic effect quickly."
LOVE!!! So much...movement.
"bent toward the impossible."
SPOON, A BENT SPOON!
"plagiarism of divine words"
Me likes.
This is good. All your bracketed lines are witty
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Love; such a very complicated yet simplistic emotion to feel. Unknowing of the pace, yet ever sure of heart's intent. A beautiful sadness, reassured by faith in blissful tide. A very well penned piece, and a lovely rendition to the inspiration chosen.
"And even shadows become somewhat soothing,
while veins are bent toward the impossible."
.. just the thought can be comforting in absence, knowing the dream is merely awaiting reality ..
Great write!
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I am always so impressed with your word usage (sighs)
and this is so perfect...
love, beautifully played out:
" These thoughts are herded by cupid first slowly,
then in pause between irregular heartbeats,"
I love that line....a romantic's dream....
This is more than clever,........amazing.......
I want to take this time to thank you for being a favorite. You stepped in almost unnoticed one day and I am so glad that you did, for when I am in need of a smile, a kind word, unexpected or when I am having a quickie contest and all of the poems start to look the same and suddenly I see a spark of uniqueness and I just know it's your poem...thank you!
Lynda
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"knowing that togetherness is no mere scheme..." hmmmm. Sometimes, I could swear it is a dastardly plot to break one's heart.
Truthfully, I agree... there is more to our purpose and apparent circustances as we relate to each other than meets the eye, and it takes a lifetime of patience, perhaps more to harvest the fruits of those divine words.
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Woohoo!
Now this is simplicity! The way you personified everything was really cool!
And even shadows become somewhat soothing,
while veins are bent toward the impossible.
Wow! Like, imagery much? Lol! Fantastic write!!!
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