I feel your arms around me
as I lay my head on your chest
knowing you've finally found me
I surrender myself to rest.
As the sounds of the music enfold me
and together we slowly sway
I wish for you to eternally hold me
and in your arms I long to stay.
But I find that I am dreaming;
that I'm standing here alone.
I wake to the sound of my screaming
and realize that you're gone.
I've dreamed you into being
and my mind has brought you here
in hopes that what I'm seeing
will someday soon appear.
A contest entry
- GET YOUR POEMS OUT THERE by Ken-Maverick.
450 points, ended August 17, 2008, 32 entries
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Comments
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Another nice write. Solid rhyming and rhythm. Best of luck in the contest.
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really amazing poem in my opinion! You managed to make the poem flow and rhymed extremely well! I like the technique you used by setting the scene and starting off with how you have the special person you've always desired and by the end, your bubble gets burst and you realise it wasn't true but you still keep your hopes up
I really love this poem and cant point out anything that i feel needs improvement!
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Hmm, mental note to myself - gotta come back to this one
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Uh-oh...doesn't sound like you were too enthused :-p
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no no no, not what you think
I was busy at the time, snd i wanted to read it properly thats why.
But i really enjoyed the read and glad i did come back.
All the best in the contest
Ken
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