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porcelain

i outgrew my mold

replaced emotion
with tendon and a pulse
fit for a separate body

moved beyond
monochromatic toy soldiers
and brought color
that would make the Gods
gasp in wonder

because i never
saw the aesthetic
in adobe

Author notes

39 words

Hmmm....
Not so sure about this.
I like it... but at the same time I don't. >.<

The adobe I'm referring to is the clay; not the company that makes computer programs by the way

I'm slowly starting to figure myself out...
That's what this is about

Thanks for inspiring me with this great contest!
Hope this is what you're looking for!

A contest entry

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  • Xombii
    September 1, 2008
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    Once again, another beautiful write.

    This piece has again, the subtle imagery, but a deep meaning to it. Your word choice is lovely, and even though it takes putting the definition in your authors notes, haha, it's good to see use of other, not so common words in modern poetry.

    This is beautiful.


  • whiterabbit.
    August 29, 2008

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    I love this. The way you write is just beautiful. You have so much talent. I can really feel the emotions in this.
    I'm still trying to figure myself out. Hopefully I'll discover more every day.
    Brilliant write doll.
    ♥


    • stasis
      August 29, 2008
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      thank you for your comment =]
      and it happens pretty suddenly. good luck with it!
      Also, i finished my entry for your contest. i hope you enjoy it and wish you the best of luck on judging!

      ♣ Tegan


      • whiterabbit.
        August 29, 2008
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        I hope so and thank you
        && I'm so glad you entered

        • stasis
          August 29, 2008
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          thank you.
          I'm being a major contest whore nowadays, because my friend and me are trying to write 100 poems in 100 days.
          So I need all the inspiration I can get
          ^_^

          thanks again for the comment!


  • zochit2me gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    Lol
    Love your AN about adobe...I think I could have figured that one out eventually given the prompt...hehehe.

    I like this a lot. It does have some great imagery in it but I feel it is lacking what I call the "wow" effect...still a good write.

    ♥Becky♥


  • Bruised.Roses
    August 5, 2008

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    to me it seems to be about self love and not wanting to fit the mold and simply accepting you for you, i could be wrong tho. Loved it it was a delight to read keep up the work you are so talented!!!
    xox
    Tash

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