hey
I love you and honor you as the reflect of life
since when I prefer to wind up
you cease me and instigate me to endure
and when I decide not to checkmate
then your lips makes me to accomplish
since after witnessing your breasts
I experience that what else could be more radiant
and what is the compulsion to abide
after cherishing your casing
precisely when your legs describes me
the parable of your intersect
hey...
Author notes
Prompt...
9. two hearts one soul
A contest entry
- Set your muse and mine- lot of options by poetic-enigma21.
450 points, ended August 6, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I found it to be elegant and very sentual. I really enjoyed reading your poem. Very well written and expressed
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I'm always a little leery of poems that start out with a picture like that, but your words really exceeded what the picture had to offer. That last stanza:
'and what is the compulsion to abide
after cherishing your casing
precisely when your legs describes me
the parable of your intersect'
Really great stuff. Very strong.
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Very sensual and sensitive, nicely woven.
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and what is the compulsion to abide
after cherishing your casing
precisely when your legs describes me
the parable of your intersect
wow, very beautiful and unique description of two hearts one soul
thanks a lot for sharing
good luck
cheers
shilpa -
Very nice PrabhuDayal. Hey...
"precisely when your legs describes me
the parable of your intersect."
Great writing...
Paul
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So Lovely!!
Beautiful and soft and sensual love. Two lovers becoming one soul. Equally giving and taking with each other. Best of luck. Thank you for sharing, it was a pleasure to read.
Bless You,
Sandy
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You describe beautifully the give and take of true lovemaking...'two hearts, one soul'...Best wishes in this contest. Peace always, Rhonda
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