Opening up your arms, drawn into your lips
lips to lips and hip to hips
eye to eye and hand to hand
I will prance along your chest
dance along your spine
I will promise all the greatest
for the chance that you'll be mine
Searching for heaven, but I'm so far below
toe to toe and arm in arm
knee to knee and so much glee
I'll bring you songs without a tune
and songs that may not rhyme
(but) I'll take you higher than the moon
until the end of time
A contest entry
- Proudly Presenting: ROUND 1 by Walk-Free.
1000 points, ended August 31, 2008, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I am awed by how romantic yet sweet this poem was.
I love the repitions such as "lips to lips" and "hand to hand". The imagery was powerful and I almost wished someone would say this to me in future. 
The background was great too. 
This has to be one of the best pieces so far. maybe because I just like the thought of true love. Good luck in the contest!
transit! 
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a sensual write that gave me the tingles.
you expressed a romantic side of the poem well.
thank you and best of luck
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this gave me the chills! (in the good way, it was not a scary poem, lol) it is soooo romantic and the emotions in this poem are so powerful and lovely! your imagery is awesome, your flow was there, and i dont see anything wrong in this poem! love it, and the ending was like "wow wow wow" omgosh, it was soo sweet! keep penning, and thanks so much for this entry, had a blast readin it!
~beauty of silence
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what a sweet piece. jeez, if someone wrote this for me i'd be blushing like crazy this is an awesome piece. loved every bit of this. it's sweet but not mushy, cute but not shallow and so full of love. the ending lines were great. great work.
best of lucks, checkmate.
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