Frenzied morning madness,
reluctant kiss,
march to school.
Alone now, I drop
into your place
at the kitchen table
suddenly seeing things
from your perspective.
A contest entry
- solitude by tara wilson.
2700 points, ended August 20, 2008, 42 entries
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All comments are appreciated!
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I find this an interesting take as well, in the solitude of taking a moment to place yourself in another's life..what it's like to be them, well done, thanks so much for entering
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I think this is a very strong idea and you've captured the common experience. It's an interesting take on the prompt, too, I believe.
Thanks for this.
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This is exquisite. It reminds me of a short scene in a movie where a character has a sort of epiphany about another character - an earth-shattering one.
Beautifully executed, thoughtful write. It really gets me thinking about the people, the "frenzied morning madness", and what we may be missing about the people we love - how is life from their point of view?
Thanks for sharing this spectacular piece.
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I love your ability to capture moments in time in so few words. I also love your ability to help us look uner the surface of the mundane, to give us a glimpse into how another might see the world. For me, it's what poetry is all about.
simply, and beautifully written. I love how each line is complete, and out of context each one (with the exception of the last) could be taken in an entirely different context.
most defenately three antler thingies worthy.
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I love this!!!
it's length is perfect, if it were to be any longer it would simply ramble, you get to your point, and it's wonderfully clear
Love the last two lines.
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