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Tuesday: She thinks of the Absurdity of Poetry & Life

 

 

thoughts about paper bruise her mind

in quantities,  unleashed and then crumpled

the bins of the world

would be mache-faces

 

making balloon moulds of old newspapers

fascinations about morbity & obituriues

politics of yesteryear or today -  

                                                    the indifference of liars

 

she makes props with scissors, stones

and flips coins to make a words

plays like a sixpenny sweet mix-up

                                                 [as a child she read all the C.S Lewis stories]

 

maybe if the wardrobe door opens

into a land of Bukowski's dribbles and Rimbaud's debauched environs

where cheap booze would make her pen itch

 

& money really did grow on trees,

Spike Milligan once said that he saw Jesus on a train

if he did -  would he have asked him about Ning Nang Nong poems and life?

 

she never writes in diaries unless it's a reminder

scribbles things in indelible ink to rely on parity

pure skins unfold like ancient hands

that have held things:

children

the dying

pens

brushes

knives

silver spoons

and of course

the blood of the poet


 

 

 









 

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  • myrataal silver member
    January 1
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    Congratulations on the Silver, G ...

    to spoon some more dessert during 2009!

    Love
    Myra


  • silkypoet
    October 24, 2008
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    she never writes in diaries unless it's a reminder
    scribbles things in indelible ink to rely on parity
    pure skins unfold like ancient hands
    that have held things:
    children
    the dying
    pens
    brushes
    knives
    silver spoons
    and of course
    the blood of the poet


    the last stanza is gold, good luck in the contest

    Lori


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    Ah..what a deep thoughtful piece to unravel the layers of the life one by one..and touched the truths behind those layers ..I love it..well done...

  • celadia
    August 13, 2008
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    you know a lot about poetry and cultural unfluences. i admire that and the poem is good too.


  • Zez
    August 12, 2008

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    writing fleeting thoughts whose importance you know are valuable, but too tough to want to paste down on a slide for review. i get it. its part of the diary you wish you never experienced, wish you never had to sit down and think about, and hope you never come across the entry in the future. but there it is, in its glorious scribbles, for only you to whince at. its who we are as individuals, and what makes it worth getting up in the morning, and vowing to do things a little better and brighter.

    or maybe i'm just way off, but thats what i got

    love ya gilly


  • Cat gold member
    August 10, 2008
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    -


  • Peteskid gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    I like this poetry seems to have a hard exterior and inside a place of understanding and resolution... excellent writing here...PK


  • Musimwa
    August 7, 2008
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    Nice sentiments. I like your line of thought. Keep this up my sister. Have a good day

  • silverfish
    August 6, 2008

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    absurd

    thou beliest thyself; your poetry illuminates a bright life sound of mind and spirit. -silverfish

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 5, 2008
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  • Cannonsfire
    August 5, 2008

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    If humans are born to be human and poets born to be poets then I think you capture both of them quite nicely lol the human bit is the 'blah' The rest is you and poetry


  • Lucy.
    August 5, 2008

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    I have to love this because you mention C.S. Lewis

    Perfect entry into this contest, you lovely poet you.


  • Oleander
    August 5, 2008
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    Um, this just blows me away. It paints my life...I am the she.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    I like this... it says to me, you are because you have to be.. at least that's what I read in it..
    and I can't see how anything else matters in the grand scheme of things




  • Nicolette gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Each poem is a diary in itself, and your book of days is a diary of your poetic brilliance, wonderful, sharp mind and that big big heart of yours, Gilly.

    I can only sigh when i read this...how long can one live in poetry...? My hand have held so many things too...children (broken ones), rapists, abusive parents, my own children, the dying, pens, tears...you know it all.

    this one touched me; you are beautiful, my friend. you so often write what i can barely articulate.



    much love
    ~ Nicolette


  • ca ne fait rien
    August 5, 2008
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    Good to see you back Sweets.

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 5, 2008

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    I've been writing in journals a lot lately. I have 3 notebooks that I use (I'll have to organize them at some point) and when I can't write .. I write things I don't want to forget:

    Being lifted and wrapped around a person.. and laid down as if I weigh nothing.

    The first time a shy cat trusted me enough to pet her.

    The stench of goodbye wafting through my room

    The way absence makes a heart think it cares; but really it only wants the comfort of apathy again.

    Not eating ice cream in Catskill

    Clumsy kisses under beautiful waterfalls

    Nude men playing your favorite song on the guitar

    etc etc etc

    see?

    Sometimes they become poems, often they just serve as reminders..

    and yes, my gilly, you are a poet.



    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      sounds like a very therapuetic weekend to remember and write down and write about... and it's right!! - right



      thank you lovely girl... love you loads

  • Rowan gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    blood, sweat, and tears, ain't it? Loved this thoughtful piece, blah? never.


  • apples fell
    August 5, 2008
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    Oh and no
    "blah blah blah" allowed.
    You jest.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      tweaked

      • apples fell
        August 5, 2008

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        Why yes you did, which is wonderful.
        You didn't rape it like some tweaks people
        call tweaks around here...LOL.


        • NurseChilly gold member
          August 5, 2008

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          no no, no raping or pillaging round here, only the vikings do that...

  • apples fell
    August 5, 2008
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    Though this is wordy in places, you really have something good and fortunate. I really enjoyed how the poem followed down to singular images that create a focal point and make you feel each sound, each moment. Your opening stanza is really remarkable and I think, your strongest part. A few tweaks here and there, by your own choice, and this could be even more effective. And this: "she never writes in diaries unless it's a reminder" - I really relate to this image, only with myself in mind. I use to keep a diary but it started to depress me, so I stopped.

    Good stuff here Gilly.
    You gots a poem filled
    with poetry and other things.

    ;

    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      heheheh.. thanks James, you always catch me, when I'm going to edit and strip down.. lolol

      but yes, thank you my dear friend.. your words always brighten my day

      • apples fell
        August 5, 2008
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        LOL. Caught you all naked... I have a tendency to do that. You are always welcome. You know I love your poems and I'm just a "slave to you"...LOL. Oh my god! That's totally a brittany spears song...It's sad that I even fucking know that...LOL.

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