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bathed in cool dew
and moonlight

a woman with flowing
blonde hair and
a red dress

spotlights a
pearlescent piano

she bows,

takes a seat and plays
a spirited jazz piece,

from somewhere
inside the shadows, I stand,

swaying
to the beat of her soul

naked at night,
I feel
sunrise and birdsong.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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An actual dream I had just a few nights ago.

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  • Margaret Denham gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    I must have missed this one. I'm sorry dear

    Beautiful imagery as always. Your dreams are just so "you".

    Love Margaret


  • Amera gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    I was not the only judge for my contest and this poem deserves special recognition. The least I can do is put an Amera gold on it.


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Aw, aren't you sweet, thanks Amera and it was an honor to even be considered for this contest. As for not winning a trophy, it’s not like I’m going to lose any sleep over it dear.

      AP is NOT my whole life, which seems to be the case for a select few, but merely a minute fraction, a pastime, a respite from my profession as a federal police officer.

      I could not care less if I win anything on this site. It just so happens that I have won many of those coveted trophies though, so I guess I’m doing something right. In closing I would like to make it clear that I’ve never been one to solicit the favors and/or grovel to be part of any popularity contest.


      Sincerely,
      MJ Donnelly.

      • Amera gold member
        August 20, 2008
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        You don't have to. Your talent stands on its own. You have always been a good friend and a wonderful man. I'm so honored to be your friend.

  • Amera gold member
    August 17, 2008
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    As always with your poetry, this poem is filled with beauty and imagery. You have painted sound and motion along with the lovely setting. This is a wonderful entry for our contest. Thank you so much for thinking I was worthy of your entry.

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      August 17, 2008
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      Oh please, it's 'your' poetic skill that I'm in awe of. LOL!
      Thanks anyway Amera, and pinch Allan on his rosy red cheek for me, tell him mj sends his best.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    August 16, 2008
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    This sure beats the dream where I am ran over by a train.
    Joe


  • sailor ptolema
    August 16, 2008

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    I love this. . Dreams are some of the most interesting things to writes about . Seventh stanza is what does it for me .
    g'luck.

    Sailor Ptolema

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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    yes!

    much better, I like


  • PerVirtuous
    August 15, 2008

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    This is an interesting abstract dream. I love the image but wonder if this "matter of fact" language is in keeping with the image. Although you say:

    from somewhere in the shadows,
    I stand rocking
    to the beat of my soul;

    you do not indicate any feeling. It is like a characterization of an event rather than a photograph or a detailed painting. Yet, the style of the characterization does not take advantage of the potential exaggerations normally used in that medium to emphasize the salient points of the image. It is a very good poem and a welcome addition to the contest.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 13, 2008
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    this is wonderful dad. great write and good luck in the contest *hugs*
    Stephanie ♥


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 10, 2008
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    dreams like this were meant to evolve into poetry. Wonderful, Michael. Love, Lane


  • creationsfromheart
    August 6, 2008

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    Aw A Dream filled

    with such beauty to bring forth words from your pen, sounds like a bit of spiritual growth going on from with in your own soul. I love this write it is filled with so much in so few words it makes one crave to feel what you have felt in this dream. I love every metaphor in this, but my favorites that will not leave any time soon are ...

    I walk naked at night, bathed in
    cool dew and
    misty moonlight
    from somewhere in the shadows,

    I stand rocking
    to the beat of my soul;
    until sunrise and birdsong wake.

    Theese two verse are pure poetic. Love them .






  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    NIce dreams

    lead to great poetry. Maybe that's my problem I don't remember my dreams. LOL
    Well done.
    Buddy


  • michellemybelle gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Just lovely, so vivid and colorful. What a great dream to have, I hope you have many more just as this.
    Michelle


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 5, 2008

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    Refreshing!! I want more!

    All the best in the contest,
    She-ra


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Dream On, Poet!!!

    This is a great dream. I wonder why you chose to awaken from such a fantastic, melodic romp in your magical forest?!!? I love it!!! Good luck in this contest!!! Peace, Cyn


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Sigh... oh what a gorgeous dream!! And a beautiful write.. done in your usual brilliant style my friend!

    This has a wisful feel to it, with also a very sensual beat! An amazing mix of the two!

    Oh to have dreams such as this!

    Outstanding as always, and I wish you all the best in the challenge hun!


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