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Faults and Defects

A tranquilized menace
leashes my thoughts
as desire drives my hands
into linen tunnels.

 

The forearm compulsively

uses her face

to spider

the headboard mirror.

 

Scenes melt

like lipstick left

in my car;

her purse seems to not close.

 

Nuances flicker against

remembrances.

Her lower lip

sags slightly East.

 

Her spine bends out

as if in limbo poses;

While flat feet grope

for air under poundage.

 

Six or so years to the day,

she fell from the 20th floor

onto my Fiat.  Some say shoved;

I suspect jumped.

 

Five days with her family,

learning Spanish prayers.

While metronomed pulses

registered her heavings.

 

When woken by Angels,

she found me in habits

of changing sopped pillows,

and dressing her wounds.

 

My name evaporated

off of her accent

into my sad phobias

of being alone.

 

At first she was helpless

with inkblots and crutches.

Spending quarters in vending,

coffee kept me busy in vigils.

 

When striding unnassisted

came like a best friend's birthday,

she finally walked 

away from hospital scents.

 

In the sunlight she was easy,

and a listener to Deftones.

Off of the common grounds

I built her a House of Dates.

 

She accepted with grand corners,

as her smile bench-pressed gloom.

To Tuscani Village we decided,

what with a boasting wine list and all.

 

She ascended upon her Greek olives

in the calmest of fashions.

With a wave of her wristwatch,

my needs became starved.

 

Asked her for a commitment

in a three o' clock moment.

Grasping onto my coarse offer,

she blurted out the summer month.

 

That June, in lawful hip-touches,

she shook me into evening.

Getting screamed at the next morning

though, was quite a setback.

 

So see, I've struggled in gradual tones,

a swallow for more weakness

doesn't soften the muscles

that carress her face.

 

So as I'm giving her children,

six or so years later,

the desires are quelled,

while the Disgust Club sends me coupons.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

how one can "lose that feeling"

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  • aanika
    August 28, 2008

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    as desire drives my hands
    into linen tunnels.

    The forearm compulsively
    uses her face
    to spider
    the headboard mirror.

    your imagery is fantastic.
    seriously, it blows my mind.
    you've taken this contest
    hands down.
  • ecrivain01
    August 5, 2008
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    P.S.

    That's a great background.
  • ecrivain01
    August 5, 2008

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    Not my favorite subject matter ...

    but you've certainly done an excellent job with the "lose that feeling" part. All in all, this is quite well done.


  • righteousme
    August 5, 2008

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    So see, Iv'e struggled in gradual tones,... that is the epiphany of this piece for me... sometimes the gradual build up of the let down is overwhelming... and real... sometimes realness scares me and other times i want to press my ear to it and listen...
    great piece!!!


  • malmadre gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    When love comes falling out of the sky and knocks you flat, it takes your breath away until you finally figure out that it's smothering the life out of you. "Scenes melt like lipstick left in my car" I like this line especially.

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