I have longed to touch your heart
To have that very first kiss
To dance with you in eternity
To dance with you in bliss
Hearing your soft spoken words
Is confusing to my mind
They open up my heart
A new treasure that I find
I see in you a beauty
So sweet and so clear
Your spirit is something special
So loving and so dear
When you are saying nothing
The words you speak are true
The beauty of your smile
Washes away the darkest hue
I hear your explanations
It's as if I'm inside a dream
The world inside reality
Just isn't what it seems
You have me tied in chains
I don't know what to do
With this love inside
The love I have for you
Author notes
This poem is dedicated to Jennifer.
Gummie Bears will soon take over the world
A contest entry
- Enter Your Best Poem Here, ONE WINNER TAKES ALL by echo-ink.
725 points, ended August 8, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This is an exquisite love poem. I really like the way it was written, the flow and the rhyming. Thank you for entering the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Sandi -
so soft and flows gently and beautifully
simple words that enter the heart and transcend it to the soul enriching it and giving such rapture for the existence of such deep love that says I LOVE DEEPLY AND TRUTHFULLY.
Dancing for the eternity with a beloved one who truthfully loves me on love and tolerance tunes is and has always been a dream of mine.
Thank you for sharing such beautiful poem.
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Aw, this is beautiful and touching. Thank you for entering my contest.
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i love it, it is great! it has a great rhyme and the way the emotion is shown in the poem is just perfect.Thank you for entering and good luck.
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nice poem about love with good rhyming.
Best wishes,
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Yes..this is love which tied every one of us ..and we all are just handicapped with it..you are very sweet though with the declerations..well done..
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Thank you for entering! This is a lovely write about love and being truly dedicated to that love for someone amazing. I love the way you describe it so personally and yet in a way anyone who reads it can relate to. Great structure, flow and rhyme too! I particularly like the whole verse:
"When you are saying nothing
The words you speak are true
The beauty of your smile
Washes away the darkest hue"
Brilliant and original
This poem reminds me of that feeling of being truly in love with someone, my first ever poem was inspired by that feeling and its wonderful to see it in someone elses words too. Well done! and thank you again for your entry!!
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This is simply beautiful and I love
the way that you put this all together!
I'm surprised that you only got an HM
for this one. I do hope that you do
well with it in this contest! Lovely
work here and good luck to you! Thanks
a lot for your comments on mine!
Jeremy0826 -
so cute! i love it!
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aaww
what a sweet piece on the love you have for this person. The feelings are so real and just right. rhyme was good too 
"I have longed to touch your heart
To have that very first kiss
To dance with you in eternity
To dance with you in bliss"
such soft lines I wishes someone were saying these lines to me.
I hope this relationship lasts forever!! good luck!!
transit~
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Wow.
What a strong piece, this really did make my heart skip a beat! I felt the emotion venting through this poem:
'I hear your explanations
It's as if I'm inside a dream
The world inside reality
Just isn't what it seems
You have me tied in chains
I don't know what to do
With this love inside
The love I have for you'
Nice Rhyming.
Well done, and Good luck x
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I like it
I'd have to say that my favorite stanza is the first one
"I have longed to touch your heart
To have that very first kiss
To dance with you in eternity
To dance with you in bliss"
Its a bit repetive, but you seem to utalize this repition well. -
wonderful work here. the emotions are very well captured by your sweet words, and they speak volumes. wonderful piece
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Pretty good...I to love rhyme...
What else have you got...
Go well
Be Blessed
Simon
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nice!!!
This is an excellant poem. It will touch many people's heart. It has captured mine. my favorite part is...
I see in you a beauty, so sweet and so clear
Your spirit is something special, so loving and so dear
When you are saying nothing, the words you say are true
The beauty of your smile, washes away the darkest hue
There is so much meaning in this it rings true.
Youn are a true poet and I hope the best of luck in the contest. Also I can't wait to read more of your work
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very nice write and the rhyme is sweetly penned. Good luck.
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A wonderful love poem, and I do love rhyme, my fav. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest. PL
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