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Please Kiss Me (TRITINA FORM)

Come and kiss my lips, in an hurry would you please?
In my dreams from miles away just to plant a kiss,
you ride the clouds forevermore just to be with me.

Within the skies I say goodbye, your leaving me.
Can I ride alongside, the Master pretty please?
Maybe He will give me time, to plant a loving kiss.

As we are playing chase the winds will carry my kiss,
and upon your cheek it shall land, sent to you from me.
When its time for another, the magic word is please.

So now you know how I feel, so can you please kiss me?

Author notes

Tritina
A while ago whilst surfing for Sestina, I came across this mini version. Having bookmarked it for further investigation I promptly forgot it. Much later whilst researching ten line poetry, I came across this form buried in the depths of Google and remembered my earlier bookmark, and found that this form was not a one-off, and there were many examples of it, thus making it deserving of a place in the Ten Line Poetry site.

Being modeled from the Sestina, there is no rhyme scheme, instead it comprises of three stanzas using the same three words in a Sestina like pattern, and a final line which uses the three words in the starting sequence:

A.. B.. C...
C.. A.. B...
B.. C.. A...
A,B,C...


The meter is not specified but is usualy tetrameter or pentameter.

Tritina

A ten line poem we’ll write, just you and I
But let’s call it Tritina, shall we, love?
Connecting lines together...fun with you!

Could we take turns so I could share with you?
Although it might be hard, for sometimes I
Begin with words you might not like or love.

But we could try, okay, for I would love
Co-ordinating all the lines with you
At last, our own creation, you and I.

It ends, Tritina says, with I love you.

Gloria Carpenter
http://www.thepoetsgarret.com/decastich/tritina.html
A.. B.. C...

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Comments

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  • warrior-eagle
    August 25, 2008
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    Oooh,super seductive.
    Nice.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    August 5, 2008

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    O' my sweet baby! it is just beautiful and flows like silk and pulls a sigh from deep within...winner wrote all over it... just for you


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 5, 2008
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    Superbly done. I am not a fan of sestinas nor of these in general but this works really well!


  • Griswold silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    ~SMOOCHES~ Love it baby, this is very well done sweetheart. from here to there. Love you...Scott


  • Cannonsfire
    August 5, 2008

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    There ya go sexy...from me to you because you are so clever at these forms and I loves ya C


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 4, 2008

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    This is fantastic! You really outdone yourself w/ this one. Now I want some sugars... dang.

    She-ra


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Love the captivating content, form, and style passions!
    Thanks for sharing you, and continue to shine on V~

    Much love, Timothy

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