she beckons me--
a fresh nymph
with prowess eyes
sculptured with- her
proud jewels
and lofty hands
and should I touch,
the glossy red…
of frail flowers
...spread vainglorious,
upon the garden vermilion
in her pale suit
and tempestuous
heart
soft as seas… tumble,
I croon to murmurs,
mouths apart
torrents of passions …swell
a dew of kisses …as I lay
sweetly clung,
to the
blossom fill.
Author notes
something different from me...
oh hum
A contest entry
- Summer Sizzler...Men Only by Dalaney.
1300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I am in the process of editing this poem
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wonderfully crafted. smooth as the visuals that come to sight within it. different is good from time to time, and your different is impressive! nice job! ~ EZB
www.moodgroove.com
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lol
well she got something different from you, it is pretty good imingery, good luck in her contest
Lin
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apart from this glorious evocative poem is this word "vainglorious," omg...that alone says so very much.....whew......stupendous wordsmithing.
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gee thanks carol...i didn't think anyone would like this being i love writing succinct and simple form...lol i guess i should be impressed with myself thanks for dropping by...oh...you are the word smith...
my dear
mal
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"I croon to murmurs mouths apart" what a wonderful combination of of metaphor and alliteration. People on this site don't realize how really subtly sexy your poems can be. I'm confuzzed as to the title, but as long as you are filling those blossom with your liquid desire, who cares! Best wishes my friend!
Linda
Now please don't forget to cover my comment! LOL
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breathe girlie...and as long as you love my sexy poems...i dont care lol..id do a emote for ya...but my keyboard got wet from the rain....it's not working right whaaaah
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a beautiful poem...the title combined with the poem makes me think of you, a male, among her petals.
lovely, thanks for entering
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ummm gee thanks tara...glad you like it...it's not my usual style though...nor typical love poem...i think i went of the deep end..haha...
kissy for you
mal
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