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slight intake of air

I just want magnificence
descending down my spine
stirring up inner thought,

so whispers can slip out again,
exist as light

filtered through leaves,
it lingers and taps at a trace of electrons,
a filament lifting vertebrae, one by one
as each resettles into a slightly new place
and sits together as a spine instead of anarchy

reunited, time would stop to watch
the sound of a guitar string vibrate,

full of intention, at one with its purpose


I close my eyes,
complete, soaking rapture
and remember how to breathe,
move with life

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Subtle
Prompt: => by adsaige

"you are subtle
i wish i could
know you better."

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  • adsaige
    August 14, 2008

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    Judged


    Well, this certainly is a piece that is subtle with its own qualities that make me sigh and nod my head as if to understand everything that was said.

    "A filament lifting vertebrae." An image that I'm sure I've heard in one of your poems before.

    Rather morbid but sophisicated taste.

    Thank you for entering. Good Luck!


    • marlene47 silver member
      August 14, 2008
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      I do like "spine" images; well, the bones in general - they seem to have lots to say.
      Thanks for the comment.