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Frailty's Freedom

 

Veiled existence

once offered as

authentic

gave no worth to

              weakness

 

Fearing exposure

of failings would

render me flawed;

a sin of sorts

so I've been taught

 

So many years hiding 

within inner corners

cowering,

while pretence

         stormed strong

along paths taken

 

A futile facade

 

Now I embrace

uncertainty

and find freedom

          in frailty

 

No longer concealing

error due to ego

 

Seeing strength                                                             

in all that is

         left to learn

 

and simply standing

 

                 genuine

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Quote
2)"I am finding that vulnerability gives me great strength, because you're not hiding anymore." - Tori Amos

(Found it very hard to choose one quote as they were all amazing!)

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  • rbruce gold member
    September 15

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    I love your message here, almost that the weak shall inherit the earth. Strength does come from adversity.
    Congratulations on your trophy.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 23

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    I love the quote you used and the way you developed it was outstanding. I could quote lines I like but I'd be quoting basically every line. Congrats on a well deserved gold trophy!!


  • Valley Girl silver member
    August 12

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    Wow hun! Another fabulous write about self awareness, not feeling that you need to hide any longer, that you should just get out there and enjoy life. Congratulations on the Gold! Well deserved indeed! ♥

  • ladybug27
    August 11
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    Great job on the gold! Very well earned

  • Amera gold member
    August 9

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    I love it! Every poem I see that you write has a gold trophy on it before I get to read it. Well deserved! This poem gives an insight to personal emotion that we rarely see penned.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    August 9

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    Your ending was superlative. An absolute treasure. This whole piece is. Really brilliant write. What else can anyone say about it?


  • notorious silver member
    August 8

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    Excellent

    I missed something you wrote?!!!

    LoL..."written by one of AP's best poets"
    INTERESTING & SO TRUE



    "once offered as authentic"
    Man, I love that. It's like, "Bitch, I gave you a fallacy to upchuck."

    But...more elegant.

    "a sin of sorts/so I've been taught"
    Why do I have the feeling you actually mean these 2 particular lines?

    "cowering, /while pretend stormed strong"
    I LOVE THAT...'stormed'...hehe. Makes me think of X-men's Storm.
    'cowering' is a neato word.

    "freedom in frailty"
    I dunno about that one...I'd rather kick some machine gun ass, yo!
    LoL...but cool phrase.

    "error due to ego"
    This makes me grin. 'error' makes me think of Error 404 (hate that) & 'ego'...well, an inflated ego can definitely make erros.

    "and simply standing/genuine"
    Cool separation of 'genuine' in a different line...has a measured effect.

    Kudos on the Gold & Spotlight.

    I hope you feel guilty for pulling out of the contest.
    *laughs maniacally & bakes lemon cupcakes w/o virtually sharing them*

  • mwilson50
    August 7

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    So true, well done

    A poetic revelation. Ego and facades waste so much time and recources, when we could all get a lot more done if we could just drop the facades, let go of our ego - easier said than done.


  • deamonchild69
    August 7
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    Awesome!


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    August 7

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    Wow.. sissy you did a wonderful job.. No wonder it got gold!!!! lol.. I really love where you took this.. Congrats on winning gold!!! Very wonderful!!!


    Angel

  • Kimmigirl
    August 7

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    Very nice job

    I identify with this peom in so many ways, it really touched me, I have also written a poem based on my fear of failing and trying to live up to the name people have giving to you, its called "Expectations of a single being", thanks for the great poetry
  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    August 6

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    masterful take on the prompt - well deserved gold indeed.

    i dentifiable as well in many parts, particularly for me:

    A futile facade

    Now I embrace
    uncertainty
    and find freedom

    in frailty


    wonderful mia bella cugina
    Tasha


  • poppa silver member
    August 6

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    Wow ... congrats on your gold... thoroughly deserved..
    arent we all a little flawed, yet we hide it so we appear "genuine"


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      August 6
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      Yes we do hide it, but why bother? As you say.. we are all flawed, and should just be genuine in that hey!

      Thanks

  • jcat gold member
    August 6

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    "Fearing exposure
    of failings would
    render me flawed;
    a sin of sorts
    so I've been taught"

    I think that we have all been taught this!! A harsh lesson in life comes from when we need to learn to let down the guard and allow others to see our vulnerabilty... We are all flawed and need to learn to embrace all that we are and stand tall and GENUINE.. Very well said and I am glad to see a GOLD attached to this....Congrats!


  • crimsondew silver member
    August 6

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    Wonderful write again dear....Inspiring in its own way...Glad I read this...
    Congrats on the gold!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 5

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    Your words do have a effect on me dear, terse yet pensive. All the best dear.


    With much love,
    mj.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 5

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    There is always so much more to learn no matter how old we are. Stunning piece hunni I really loved the 3rd verse here, stood out to me, most likely due to the darkness within in Simply superb to read as always...best of luck in the contest, but its winner to me


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 5

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    Sometimes we have to show our vulnerablity to thrive and grow, this appears to be what you are doing, acknowledge the past and move on. Great inspiration you drew from the prompt in the contest. Best of luck


  • michellemybelle gold member
    August 4

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    Wonderful message! A wise person knows, they have much to learn and all we know, is ourselves and today. I loved this! Good luck in this contest.
    Michelle


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 4
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    very inspiring

    A great message, and a great write! much luck to you my friend in the contest.

  • SoulWhispher
    August 4
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    Great poem, you have done well with this one, Love John


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    August 4

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    We can all be frail in somethings and strong in others, we need to find the freedom to just be who we are Nice job SIL, good luck C


  • secberm
    August 4

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    Sweet. You do have a way with words, my dearie. Looks like you work wonders with a magic Bic. Write on and good luck.

    Dez


  • SweetXDestiny silver member
    August 4
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    amazelyly done auntie
    you have a real way of words

  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 4
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    Speaks volumes of wisdom

    in such a sparsely worded verse. Most excellent.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 4

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    YES.... Thank you this is just beyond amazing. Thank you muchly for taking the time to enter and I am glad that you picked this quote. Be well

  • Carolina Moon silver member
    August 4

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    Your words simply shine Sis..an excellent write packed with so much meaning. Best of luck, though I doubt you'll need it with this one!


  • crazymomma
    August 4

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    OMG! I feel like you wrote about my life in this one. I hated admitting to being needy but once I did life got so much easier. I love how you wrote this so beautifully. The flow was wonderful and it is an amazing take on the quote. Not very abstract though which surprised me coming from you. Good luck in the contest (not that you need luck).


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      August 4
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      lol.. I've only recently started abstract, most isn't quite as much.

      Thanks hun!

  • arafura
    August 4
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    Fine poem my friend. Beautifully written and full of gentle wisdom. BRAVO!

  • chiefmac
    August 4

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    This is so true to life. Feelings are ignored, if this is not true, when we go to the store and asked,
    how are you today? Tell them of back ache, swollen knees, hair falling out, broken nails. They will thank you and push you along as quickly possible. They want to know you are fine. To accept a diminished ability is worth the effort, as all of us have these flaws, be honest.

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