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Weight

I kept my convictions,
though not easily.
I was in love with a
guy, and he with me.

We planned to marry
when I graduated,
we had sex before hand,
although we could have
waited.

So at 17
years of life,
I became
my true love's wife.

Three years later,
not quite twenty one.
We both were questioning,
what we'd become.

I wanted children,
suddenly, he did not,
his words hit me
like a shot!

Two months later,
divorced and alone,
all I had wanted
was a family; a home.

Destiny smiled threw
me a curve...
giving me more, than
I think I deserve.

My true soul mate,
thirty three years
(in this life),
making me, grandma,
mother and wife.

I have no regrets,
happy, content.
I sometimes wonder
where my first guy went.

Be comfortable, with
what you give,
and if it doesn't work out...
"live and let live."

Author notes

Female 54..tomorrow...
Just remember, not all people look at things the way you do...it takes a long time to get to know someone well enough to give of yourself....no matter what you decide...be at peace with your decision....and weigh the outcome....be prepared for the best...and worst!! I don't regret what I did....it was a wonderful experience at the time.....Best of luck! Use birth control please!!!!
and yes, the title is a pun....

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  • trista gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    I absoluely love the title for your poem! And even though you don't fully explore the potential metaphor of this decision being heavy on your mind or something along those lines, lol, I think it comes through pretty well that it's still a serious decision. I thank you for the author note as well...and knowing you didn't regret it is really good, to help balance with the incredible number of entries all saying they wish they had waited. It's sad for me to think that first time carries bad memories for so many people.

    On a technical note...I think "beforehand" is one word...and a couple of your line breaks and/or punctuation you might want to look at:
    L3 ending the line with "a" seemed very awkward to me...maybe put "with a guy" on a line by itself? Also consider a comma after "he" in L4?
    S4 seems like it could all be one sentence...
    S5..."I wanted children; (semi-colon, since it's a complete thought yet related to the next line)
    suddenly, he did not. (period)"
    (H)is words hit me"
    S7, L1...comma after "smiled"

    As always...just suggestions based on MO...to be taken for whatever it's worth.

    Hum...not quite sure why you think fate gave you "more than you deserved" as I'd say you were definitely cut out to be a mother and grandmother. I hope your energy and zest for life has rubbed off on each of them!

    Thanks so much for sharing your experiences and viewpoint, and good luck in the contest!

    s
    ~J.


  • aboomer silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    love your title!! perfect!!
    Read nicely. Good message in your AN's
    best wishes in the contest

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    I think this is good in life there is a time and a place for everything I got married young way to young with someone that was not right for me it started out rough and just became rougher over time If I knew then what I know now I would of never said I do but the greatest gift I got out of the marriage are my children they are my soul my life even thought I only had one that was able to survive I will always cherrish them for the rest of my life.