She keeps herself
locked up in her tower
Watching the others
laugh and play
She keeps herself
locked up in the tower
Holding all others away.
There's nothing left here,
just a shell, broken
There's nothing left
for anyone
She sits there singing
for her lost angel
Now everything's been said and done.
(chorus)
Oh, could she be
lost in that tower
Oh, could she be
me?
How could she find
herself in that that tower
When all she wants to do is hide?
She keeps herself
locked in that tower
Singing the words
she cannot say
She's got herself
trapped in that tower
Wishing her angel could look her way
She sits at the window
watching the others
Waiting for one
who'll never return
She sits at the window
wishing for his embrace
To save her from the darkness's burn
Oh, could she be
lost in that tower
Oh, could she be
me?
How could she find
herself in that that tower
When all she wants to do is hide?
She sits there waiting
slowly dying
Unanswered longing
in her heart
She sits there waiting
darkness surrounds her
She doesn't notice the light depart.
She sees her angel
flying past, happy,
And tears fill up
her eyes again
She sees her angel,
throws herself out the window
With her dying whisper "Amen".
Oh, could she be
lost in that tower
Oh, could she be
me?
How could she find
herself in that that tower
When all she wants to do is hide?
Oh, could she be
lost in that tower
Oh, could she be
me?
How could she find
herself in that that tower
When all she wants to do is hide?
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Comments
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Wonderfully written and lyrical.
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Beautiful poem!
We all have a time when darkness surrounds us!
Great job and good luck!
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beautiful poem, i loved it. i think we all have a time when we shut others out and darkness surrounds us. most ppl can find thier angel again but some of us are lost forever.
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Wow give these lyrics a tune and you could have an honest hit on your hands! You have a way with words that truly moved me!
She sees her angel,
throws herself out the window
With her dying whisper "Amen".
Def. my favorite part!! Great write!Oz
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really good
Nice poem. I see you are rewarding. SO I should give you a better review.
"She sits at the window
watching the others
Waiting for one
who'll never return
She sits at the window
wishing for his embrace
To save her from the darkness's burn"
I like all but the last line, what if:
She sits at the window
Watching the stars
Waiting for the one
Who'll never return to her
She sits at the window
Wishing for his face
To save her from the darkness' embrace?
I don't know if you like it or not/ It's your poem.
That was just my two cents, it sounds good how it is though.
"Oh, could she be
lost in that tower
Oh, could she be
me?
How could she find
herself in that that tower
When all she wants to do is hide?"
That part threw me off, because there is so much metaphor here that ring true with clarity,
Oh, is she really me
Losing herself a wretched tower
Oh, could she be free?
How could she find herself
Out of that tower
When all she wants to do is find
A place where she can hide...
I hope you don't mind, I am merely reworking an already good poem. Good luck! I think you could if you wanted to rework it, but that is up to you.
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She keeps herself
locked in that tower
Singing the words
she cannot say
She's got herself
trapped in that tower
Wishing her angel could look her way
terrific refrain..you did wonders with that refrain..poor hapless trapped soul..that cannot speak ,express or free herself.Thanks for sharing.Visit some of my poetry as well. -
What a wonderful song.. you really expressed so much here with this write.. I really enjoyed reading this.. It was very melodic and soft.. Thank you very much for sharing..
Angel
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Very melancholy read, beautifully written. Lovely poem!
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