Dashed against a wall
bruised with inequality
inferior, inadequate.
Pulsing with pain that follows servitude.
Lacking love,
humbling oneself as a slave.
Falling on knees, before a master,
pants torn, hair disheveled.
Bruised eye, begging
pleading.
Hoping for love.
Kept back by fear
leaning forward in prayer.
Heart ripped, shredded,
pieces scattered carelessly.
Suffering in silence.
Scrapes on arms from grovelling,
as no one should do to another.
Tears shed in agony
laughter an absent commodity.
Author notes
Reverse word bank
In a list
A contest entry
- Reverse Word Bank Ver:2.0 by Loki.
1000 points, ended August 8, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very well put together. I hate it when good stuff gets left behind, saw this is quite old. Deserves more applause than this.
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Wow an amazing write, wonderfully written
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I really like this one! It's full of great imagery and emotion! keep up the great work and don't stop penning brilliance such as this, my friend! Best wishes to you in future writes. Awesome job, but maybe add some spaces? Thanks again for the share!
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beautiful.
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Beautiful
A truly inspiring poem. Please take a look at mine, and tell me what you think. -
A very intense write! I was reminded of my early poems when I read this!
"Suffering in silence.
Scrapes on arms from grovelling,
as no one should do to another."
I liked the image these words conjured up, gritty! Good!!
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whoa!!
Amazing imagery, great piece!
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Thanks for your entry, good luck.
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