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The Angel Factory Reject

Red Alert! Red Alert!
A siren chimes to the workers.
What is it? What's happened??
They shriek quite confused.
There's been a malfunction
In the angel factory!
This one's all wrong!

Short brown hair instead of long blonde,
Brown-red eyes and not blue,
A boyish nature, muscled thighs.
What are we to do!?
She's not right!
She's broken, a misfit!
She's a mistake, a malfunction!
But how can we fix it?
She's meant for hell!
Just look at her demonic side!
She'll never pass for an angel.
Calm down, take it in stride!
She's got an angel nature,
That much is true.
She's just prone to dark,
So here's what we'll do.
We'll let her live life
Unnoticed for what she is.
Until she finds a boy
To call her his.
Perhaps they'll see her angel self.
Perhaps they'll find the devil in her.
Perhaps she'll make some friends,
They'll become who they never were.
She could change the world.
But she could destroy herself too.
We'll set her in a hell on earth.
And see what she will do.
She's a reject, a malfunction.
A broken girl, a demon angel.
She busted her halo and her wings
On the conveyor when she fell.
She's a mistake of the angel factory.
She didn't come out right.
A demon girl with an angel's soul
To cry out in the night.

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  • Lunar Child
    November 2, 2008

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    The idea for this is very creative

    Your whole concept comes together very well and results in very cleverly written piece. You wording could use a smidgen of tweaking but either way its a great read.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 24, 2008

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    Oooh, I really liked this poem ! I don't even know what it was, but it was so unique & creatively written! Keep writing, dear ! ♥


  • For You. I Cry.
    August 5, 2008

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    OH MY GOD!

    that was amazing!!

    deff my favorite out of all yours (except hillbilly german) lol

    sad though 8( your not a mistake... just lost...

    I LOVE YOU KRISSEEEE!!!!

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