Git cher money ready boys
he hollered at the crew
I'll gentle down that mangy nag
before this day is through.
His manner oozing confidence
he strutted for the crowd
while ladies cheered and blew a kiss
he waved his hat and bowed.
Folks it seems for miles around
came to see the show
when Texas Ned Red river bred
rode the rodeo.
He slipped into the saddle
and signaled for the gate
the Buckskin reared and snorted fire
a thousand pounds of hate.
She jumped and twisted round and round
exploding even more
ol' Ned surprised went flyin' high
his ego bruised and sore.
He hit the dirt face down and hard
unhurt except for pride
the filly with her breathing calm
stood idle by his side.
He picked himself up off the ground
and rubbed his tender nose
he slapped his hat against his jeans
dusting off his clothes.
He shouted horse you ornery cuss
I know it's not the last
but by and by I'll stick to you
and break your sorry ass.
He climbed back in the saddle
to have another go
waiting for the sparks to fly
he pulled his hat down low.
She clawed the air with angry hooves
and then commenced to buck
pitched ol' Ned head first again
on a heap o' dungy muck.
He mounted up for one last time
determined still to win
with one foot in the stirrup
she busted loose agin.'
She broke the surly bonds of earth
and headed for the sky
hangin' on for life and limb
ol' Ned he waved goodbye.
They disappeared among the clouds
where eagles fear to fly
betwixt the dawn and darkness
in the blinking of an eye.
On starry nights when dreams appear
while fast asleep in bed
you can see the Buckskin runnin' still
and the kid called Texas Ned.
A contest entry
- Go For The Gold/Rhymers by piccola.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Grab your cowboy hats, boots and spurs. It's time for a rodeo! by ASmileForYou.
1050 points, ended July 24, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Haha! I love this poem! Exactly what I'm looking for in this contest. It iis truly perfect!
I'm glad you decided to enter!
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Ha ha!
Love the galloping meter (pun intended!
) throughout this saddle-sore tale ~ poor old Ned, hey? 
Just can't turn a trick!
Great imagery and lovely, apt use of language and colloquialisms. It reads very smoothly and just rolled off my tongue every bit as easily as Ned's rear end rolled out of that saddle! Heh heh. Very enjoyable piece of humour.
Well done. I shall have to investigate your work further ~ I''m very much into rhyming poetry!
Best of luck in this contest.
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A poem like this really deserves an applaud, sorry for the "quick draw"
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this is great work
I tip my hat to you friend. This is one of the best written poems I've read in quite a while, rhyme, rhythm and visuals are excellent.
Good luck in the contest.
Chic -
AHA i knew i had to have read your works before, indeed i REMEMBER reading this one; i thoughti t looekd familiar as i was going through it ;and if that's nto a sign of true talent i dont know what is, because i comment usually 50 - 100 poems per day, yet still remember this one
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great tale with almost perfect rhyme and flow. You are a marvelous story tale and I enjoyed this very much. It would make a great campfire read...thank you for the entry.
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Very, very good. I love "she broke the surly bonds of earth" : an excellent line. Keep up the good work. There's no' enough rhyme and rhythm on this site: you've given us a good model to emulate.
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Oh. This is a really fun poem that you have written in here. It was very entertaining and I wasn't sure what I was going to get when I clicked on this. But I thought it had good rhythmn and pacing and I just flew through the lines to see what was going to happen next. It had a really fanciful end and was just plain fun to read. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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marvellous
A truly sensational poem - albeit with the most simplistic rhyming scheme - but that's just me being pedantic.
Well done.
Robin.
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this was FANTASTIC; i absolutely loved the story that you told in here; this is the type that should be published and read all over the world; loved it - not one word of criticism here.
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EXCELLENT WORK
A creative story told with great flow, rhymeing and imagery. I was taken away into the story as if I was a part of it. Thanks for sharing your talent.
P.S. My Boyfriends name is David L. Wright...small world huh? Are you as good looking as he is...lol?
Nevadapoet
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This one could be put to music, a campfire song, it's rhymed so well! You have a lot of action going on here, I can almost see it happening as I read. Excellent!
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I like this Buckskin!
You have made this so much fun.
The only thing that made me blink was cloven hoofs?
I have never seen a horse in all my years with cloven hooves. I loved the the mare she is my kind of Horse I think she reminds me of me.
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I like this yarn in verse. Definitely a winner.I'll bet it took a bit of work to get it done and hold the rhyme and rhythm together so well. Congratulations, I have put you in the Bush Poets Society of Australia. A fictitious society I just invented. This type of poetry is popular over here and is called 'Bush Poetry'. "bunny" good.
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