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Fat, fussy Flossie
feels frozen fingers fondling-
Farmer Frank flung far.

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  • JinSays gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    OMGAWWWWWD. . .LOL this is too much!
    You're a mess, you know that?
    Okay, cowboy. I know where you're sense of humor is wallowing now
    bad.
    I loved it,
    funny you,
    lol
    jin


  • Age of Rain
    August 15, 2008
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    alliteration to this extent is not desired in a Haiku. However, admirable concept. Well done.


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    HOLY... This is an awkward write, but GREAT use of the letter F and wonderful haiku!

    F
    Fat, fussy Flossie
    feels frozen fingers fondling-
    Farmer Frank flung far.


  • Sugarfree
    August 7, 2008

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    haha that made me laugh!! like the idea of the "F" thing and with the title just being F, it makes it even more hilarious!
    Nice work lol


  • righteousme
    August 5, 2008

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    hahaha! love it... funny , the whole F thing for a starter, and its a haiku... i love when someone can mesh a lot of stuff together and still keep it interesting...
    you rocked this!!!...


  • sassykitty
    August 5, 2008

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    Anything that puts a smile on my face has to be good. I did like both the craft and humour in this - you've certainly nailed this haiku business. In my opinion Farmer Franks deserved all he got, poor Flossie.. she deserved gloves at the very least. Nice write as ever, thanks for sharing and good luck in your contest.

    • kraazk05
      August 5, 2008
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      Yes.. no fondling teats with frozen fingers! Even I know that!


  • AnonymousXO
    August 5, 2008

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    Wow you know how to mix humor and haikus and aliteration like few can do. Good job
    AnonymousXO


  • PatheticKt
    August 5, 2008

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    Quite a chuckle The last line was quite funny, indeed ^^
    Nice work again with the alliteration and whatnot; good luck in the contest as well n.n


  • BehindTheShadow
    August 4, 2008
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    This is great!

  • Topnotchsy
    August 4, 2008
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    Cute write. Good luck in the contest.


  • crazymomma
    August 4, 2008

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    LMAO!!! I do believe I have found a new form created and perfectected by you. I am really loving your alliterative haikus and now you have added humor too. This is just awesome!

    • kraazk05
      August 4, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the kind words.. it took me a minute to finish this one off properly, but I'm glad someone else found the ending funny

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