Gently,
fingers smooth soft chin,
rounding hand carved curves
with pride;
joy.
Lips moisten
with first breath
beginning momentum
of movable parts.
Release is imminent
temporarily set to drift
and flutter
upon the wave of knowledge
billowing on breezes
of choice and discovery
returning home
again
to working hands.
Author notes
Quote Prompt: God makes us with HIS own hands, but.. Unknown.
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Pamela A Lamppa
March 26 2005
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EXQUISITE! You have truly shown your range with the poems you've submitted in this contest. Your free verse is as beautiful as your form poetry. You didn't have far to go for improvement because you came to this site an expert poet.
Thank you for taking the time to enter your words here. They are words that every poet on this site should witness.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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very nice write, the symbolism is outstanding in this piece. Thanks for sharing your vision and good luck in the contest.
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The title of this caught my attention , it wasn't what I expected, it was a pleasant surprise.-Sarahlynn
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Humm..this is the journey ..and the poetry is mapping its length..wonderful indeed... I love it ..well done ...
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You have a wonderful piece of poetry here
I love your imagery and word play within
A great topic to write to,and you did an exellent
job on your poem. Best of wishes to you
Tony
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Wonderfully done.
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a very soft and wonderful interpretation of this fluid existence ... the cyclical nature of the wave, breeze, and then returning to a benevolent craftsman.
love also that we have a part in the process :
"... upon the wave of knowledge
billowing on breezes
of choice and discovery ..."
thank you and good luck in the contest.
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A vivid description..
of the process ofone of god's creation. this feels very spiritually inspiring. I LOVE IT.
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wonderful
I like the way the morning releasing the hands and the way you have described the 'wave of knowledge billowing on breezes of choice and discovery.' That makes the new day sound inviting.
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