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Skin

Smooth rabbits, polished

by the pink undersides of wolf cubs

tickle God's belly.

The exaggerated laughter of Buddha
proves nothing,

except the presence of skin,
scripted in tense temples,

relaxing into many faces

of the one.

Shame spills

from the intense navels

of perfect idols.

Layered on crucified thighs,

skin whoops

at the smell of pentacles,
   moans in the turban's folds,

cries at saffron,

  clutching bony necks
like the sorry claw

of the tiger

as it follows the ritual paths
of salt infested bones,
   soaked in hungry blood

like the fur of satiated wolves.

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  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 23, 2008
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    You got some stunning images here! where are you? Hope all is well with you.

    Lencio


  • Lsh-x
    August 27, 2008

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    Wow! You really vented well, I liked it! Alot!!

    The images given were incredible!

    Well done, Thanks for entering.


  • adsaige
    August 14, 2008

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    Judged



    So many images that I felt in this poem. There was a lot of emotions and feelings I felt. Perhaps there isn't a story line behind it, perhaps it is. It is a very powerful poem though.

    Thank you for entering. Good Luck!


  • sassykitty
    August 13, 2008
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    This certainly contains a vivid sense of imagery and the line 'layered on crucified thighs' is exceptionally powerful. I liked the use of extended metaphor and overall found this to be a very intense and raw write, which I like. Very evocative and appropriate use of descriptive detail, this certainly paints a grim portrait. Thanks for sharing.