Free spirit shone like sapphire,
pure,clean and fragrant,
other spirits played,
along competing,
mudslinging,
merrily,
Dirt hung over all spirits,
after the play ended,
they looked now,
here and there,
and saw,
that all,
were dead.
Author notes
and saw,
that all,
were dead.
by sgking123
A contest entry
- Dead Inside by XxSuicidal-LovexX.
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Comments
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your piece is very thought provoking indeed i enjoyed it very much good luck in the contest
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Hmm wow makes you think! Great write
Good luck in the contest
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Loved the vivid descriptive detail here, it's so evocative. This is such a deep and thought provoking write and I really liked the apparent simplicity of the entire piece. Great structure, and this certainly made me think. All the very best in your contest. Cheers, thanks for sharing.
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Very intriguing piece to bring the essence of the life.. I love it ..well done ...my thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem ...
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