tiger eyes were her favorite
raven hair loosely clipped
beneath her blue bandanna
she thought red too bright
and chuckled
key ring dangling as
knuckles dug sandy soil
loosening golden gems
Author notes
agates
A contest entry
- PIF Contest /Word Prompt by Rowan.
800 points, ended August 18, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
What a great creation for the contest. So well crafted. Congrats on the honorable mention
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Congratulations on your award
great visual through your words, Tearz still enjoying your page.
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Tearz
This green means a whole bunch to me. Thank you so much for reading and leaving you wonderful comment. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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original write . . liked "raven hair loosely clipped" and "she thought red too bright" . . congrats on the trophy
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Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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I like this lil snippet of someone diggin for treasure.
First line, perhaps 'favorites' should be favorite?
Anyway, great take on the prompt hon.
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Rowan
Than you so much for your kind comment. I have made the change suggested and agree, it works better. Thank you too for the HM in your contest. I am truly honored for this recognition. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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good write, nice imagery and word use following the prompt. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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ckwriter60
Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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...heartwarming!
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Thank you.
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Tis a most exellent penning indeed
I love the imagery and word play withinYou did a wonderful job on this poem, I'm so glad I read this one.
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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Thank you Tony. Always so supportive and kind. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Very nicely penned
you have such a wonderful nak for drawing ones thoughts into the imagery of your poems descriptive use of words. sort of unusual to see you write something without any Caps or punctuation ?? good write
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Thank you so much for your kind comment and YES, I rarely write without punctuation. I struggle with free verse so I felt this might force me into proper line breaks.... Almost!
I will keep working at it. I am pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you. ~Pamela
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