riverside willow
lithe limbs shade
roots sip
Author notes
picture prompt
A contest entry
- willow by james119.
600 points, ended August 11, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I love constructive critism, please indulge.
Comments
-
Excellent. I love all those sibilant sounds, I can hear the river running.
-
Lovely picture in so few words
mallard hen
rests behind green screen
her drake preens
thanks for entering -
This is a superb nature poem in three lines and ten syllables - but, is it a haiku? There are those who suggest that any syllable count/line count goes for a haiku. For me this is much the same as suggesting that a sonnet can have six lines and no rhyme because we like it that way. Well, the classic haiku (and we know it is impossible to properly import the Japanese original) is 17 syllables in three lines arranged 5,7,5. I think that the actual discipline of using the standard form is more rewarding to both the poet and the reader....but, proclaimed "haiku experts" will certainly disagree with me.
Adding your comment:
