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Was It Only Yesterday?

Was it only yesterday
that each magic moment
made time glow
with the anticipation
of sweet rapture
that soft sounds
of affection and longing
filled the quietitude
and gently began
love's symphony
that tender touches
of deft fingertips
tracing curves and valleys
of soft flesh
began moments
of sweet surrender
that kisses so lovingly
and softly placed
on lips opened and moist
gave rise to passion
so deep and complete
that looking into eyes
filled with love and lust 

told the entire story
without ever
speaking a word
that wrapped in the safety
of arms gently holding 
was the best place  
in the world just to be

that the natural joining

of two bodies

melting together

with such certainty

could answer

every one of lifes questions

was it only yesterday
that the dreamers of
the dream of love
and sweet surrender
was in reality
you and me

 

 

Copyright 2008 Shelly Price

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  • babydollxgonexwrong
    November 4, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this sensual, beautifully penned piece. The word choice was amazing and it made me want to close my eyes and imagine being that in love. It also had a hint of tragedy with the theme of yesterday. Very nice.

    I do have one suggestion: I felt as if, by the middle of the poem, the words started to blend together and the reader could begin to feel overwhelmed. Perhaps you could try stanzas and a little bit of puncuation?

    Nicely done and thanks for entering! :]


  • Riamh
    August 8, 2008
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    A beautiful description of a tender love-dance

    the natural joining

    of two bodies

    melting together

    with such certainty

    could answer

    every one of life's questions

    was it only yesterday
    that the dreamers of
    the dream of love
    and sweet surrender
    was in reality
    you and me

    Just brilliant!

    *Stands and applauds*


  • januaryrain gold member
    August 4, 2008
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    Beautiful

    I absolutely love this, great job, good luck in the contest.


  • darell
    August 4, 2008

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    Awesome!

    I love the style and feeling of this piece.
    Its like you took one big breath of air
    and enhaled, then uttered all your hearts
    emotions in a sinlge breath.
    Nicely done my friend


    • nevadapoet
      August 4, 2008
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      Thank You

      What a beautiful way to describe my poem...it gave me shivers...thank you, your comments meant alot to me.

      Nevadapoet

  • hardeepb
    August 4, 2008

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    I loved this. You used such beautiful language to describe true love. Each of your words kept me hanging on.

    "was it only yesterday
    that the dreamers of
    the dream of love
    and sweet surrender
    was in reality
    you and me"

    Love is what I live...and to have it returned is what I'll forever dream...good luck in to contest!

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