The man in a suit frowns; realizing that he’s confused. The other, with high priced technology smiles to delude. The woman on the corner smirks as she acts rude, and the man; the receiver stares blankly as he goes to do what he’s going to. But, calmly, ever so calmly, the man with the malfunction smiles as he’s tortured all the while.
Where’s the freshness in your tragedy? It seems to me our calamities lack originality. But we try.
My friend tells me that I have too much on my head; that is why I find myself, nightly leaving bed, to do some “worry relief,” to get off of my feet; to slightly be reprieved of all of our suffering. I’m calm then, so calm then…I smile, even though I’m living in denial.
There is nothing fresh in my tragedy. It seems my catastrophes lack originality. But, I try…don’t I? Don’t we try?…
…to make up new disease, to cause some daily pain? While lying through the teeth, you may taste a bit of disdain. I’m tired of this shadow that hovers over me, covering up my tracks, in a manner of which I speak. Well, we’ve got new disease, born from our surroundings, and raised by screens. We are the new disease.
Fuck your tragedy! Tell me; tell us when you’ve a case of beauty. I don’t want to know your calamities, your catastrophes; your tragedies! I’d like to see some beauty.
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Comments
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Where’s the freshness in your tragedy? It seems to me our calamities lack originality. But we try. - nice
This is also quite the original, especially in the way it is presented
My mum always tells me off for saying "off of" so I think that's a no-no
I think "to be slightly reprieved" sounds better.
The flow is a little choppy, but some of it flows almost like a song and I'd love to see it as one. I even might, with your permission, take the line I pasted at the top of the page. The 4th stanza seems like the intro to a song and then the 5th sounds like a chorus, I really like it.
I think "in a manner of speaking" flows a little better, even though it doesn't rhyme quite so well.
I think the "We are the new disease" should be set apart from that stanza and the last stanza just gotten rid of completely, I don't like it compared to the others.
Anyway, thank you for the interesting read, I genuinely enjoyed it
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