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Tattered Dreams

Upon my lap this tattered coat appears,
‘Tis not the first nor shall it be the last.
As nimble fingers strive to mend the tears,
My thimble guides the thread to make it fast.
The anguish of the conflict now has past
And remnants are left for me to mend.
For accidents cause little bones to bend.

Upon my lap I mend this coat of pride
And draw the silken thread of loving care.
The lesson learned has so been clarified
And tiny tears and threads are in repair.
My little one has learned he must beware
Of dangers that will tug against the seams,
Still... mother’s here to mend the broken dreams.

 

 

 

Author notes

Rhyme Royal

Quote Prompt: "A torn jacket is soon mended; but hard words bruise the heart of a
child." - Henry Wadsworth Longfellow (1807 - 1882)

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 2

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    Wow you have such a eautiful poem here, its wonderfully written. wonderful flow of words and it was a pleasure to read.


  • malmadre gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    It takes a patient loving hand to mend those things that are torn whether a garment or someone's pride or a broken dream. The images of the thread bringing the torn edges back together is full of caring. Making things whole again..sweet..


  • no longer a member
    August 10, 2008
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    This is so cute and sweet. Very warm. ~Bramble


  • Pisces Pieces
    August 5, 2008

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    My favorite thing about this is the notion that things that are torn or broken have the potential to be repaired and mended...especially when you have the love and support of others.

    Beautifully expressed and written!

  • montez gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Excellent!

    An outstanding effort - great rhyme and rhythm, and a tale told with clarity and imagination.
    Well worth a triple clap - unfortunately, got no free ones left, and rather bereft of pts, so I owe u 3!
    Kind regards,
    Robin.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Aww that is so precious!! Brought a warm feeling to my heart! I shall never be a mother, but I can imagine I would be this way with a child, want to mend their broken dreams and hurts.

    The quote really speaks to me too, having had many a hard word as a child, it definitely does bruise the heart!

    Yet, your poem took this to a place of warmth and beauty!

    Really a special poem Amera that I feel privledged to have read!



  • paulcreates silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    I read this one three times....it's so warm and touching.
    I like it.



    Paul


  • Emerald Dog
    August 4, 2008

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    I've been working overseas for a while and came back to see Leonard Cohen in concert last night and read this wonderful poem today. Hallelujah!


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Oh! A new form I have not heard of before. I like it! And I love this poem...as a mother I can so relate and its lovely and yet breaks my heart at the same time. I hate it when any of my children feel pain of any kind!
    Pam


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    A mother's role is fulfilled when she looks after the well being of her child, be it fixing and mending coats to looking after the emotional and physical, food, clothing, and shelter, needs as well. Lovely sentiments expressed in a wonderful way.


  • Faeryn
    August 4, 2008

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    This is my new favorite poem of yours. Yup...this is amazing!! I love the last two lines. Such a beautiful and touching poem.
    Love,
    Tay


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 4, 2008

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    Well, all the previous comments say it all -- you're an amazing woman, poetess, and friend. This stunning masterpiece is captivating and truly special! -- like you are.

    Hope you're having a peachy day,
    She-ra


  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    Lane is right

    ...but something entirely your decision. If anything ever were to be published, just let me know.

    Always words worth reading, written to perfection.
    Buddy


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 4, 2008
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    Y'know, Sis, this is pretty good.



  • Dalaney gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    I feel like you need to do SOMETHING with these beautiful poems...Your skill, talent, and love for the written word goes beyond our little poetry site...Love, Lane


  • HeavensDaughter
    August 4, 2008

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    Wow! This is so touching! What a beautiful picture of a mother being there for her son as he grows up and goes through the challenges and hurts of life.

    I really love this poem. I think it is one of your best!


  • Melodies
    August 4, 2008

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    One of the lovliest poems I've ever read...

    A poem tenderly penned with carefully chosen words gathered in the garden of the poet's heart. Precious, most certainly.


  • Skybow silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    Just Lovely Amera

    This is so tender and so real Amera. This "baby" is beautiful and well thought out. It flows like a mothers love would to comfort her child and make it better.

    Much love to you and good luck in the contest.


  • echo-ink
    August 4, 2008

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    What a wonderful poem you have penned with this prompt.

    I read the poem and then the prompt, and knew exactly what the words were saying, you have sewn a wonderful poem full of fantastic metaphor's relating to a childs pain , a mother's mistake and mending the tears. just AWESOME. I hope I never have to pick a favorite poem from your poetry, because I wouldn't be able too. love, PL


  • PerVirtuous
    August 4, 2008

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    This is beautiful and more importantly it tells a story perfectly. I am so proud of you for nailing this! I don't have the words to praise this highly enough.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    I didn't know you were a mother!

    Excellent poetry, and in a form I adore, as you know. I doubt I can beat it but I shall be trying!!!

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