peeps are sellin out and findin all new ways to play
always stickin things out here and there to make us wanna stay
it's all about money and fame with thorny crowns of roses
assuming the martyrs roll so they can shop and sell the poses
used to be that peeps were steel at winning hearts and keepin it real
now they polish up their face with lace and dye personalities teal
all this time they've no reflection to see the way their life exposes
lost in their own heads while they shop and sell the poses
maybe some day when they're old and grey they're finally gonna see
things they did today made em what they didn't wanna be
lost in limelights bitter lemon and parting their hair like an anti fashion moses
the mirror laughing cuz it's too late to shop and sell the poses
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Wow this was an amazing write.
These lines really stood out to me & lingered long in my mind
"maybe some day when they're old and grey they're finally gonna see
things they did today made em what they didn't wanna be
lost in limelights bitter lemon and parting their hair like an anti fashion moses
the mirror laughing cuz it's too late to shop and sell the poses"
Beautiful write!!!
Thanks for entering -
Wow this was an amazing write.
These lines really stood out to me & lingered long in my mind
"maybe some day when they're old and grey they're finally gonna see
things they did today made em what they didn't wanna be
lost in limelights bitter lemon and parting their hair like an anti fashion moses
the mirror laughing cuz it's too late to shop and sell the poses"
Beautiful write!!!
Thanks for entering -
Lizzy Beth,
Are you just pulling our collective legs about being 15 years old?
Like some others of your poems, this has the mature point of view of someone with more experience of humanity than is usually expected of someone with so few years on the planet. Perhaps, as they say, you have an old soul.
The wonderfully rhythmic rap of rhyme and flow captures the ear. It is the sharp, non-metaphorical imagery which cuts to the chase and the heart, however. It exposes stylin' for what it is and asks those so engaged to consider that life is not just today, but all our tomorrows including those when "they're old and grey."
"limelights bitter lemon"!? Fantastic!
"shop an sell the poses" has the possibility of becoming proverbial in our society's culture. This poem deserves a much more public audience than this silly little vanity site!
Note: Check "there" in line 8. Looks like it should be "their".
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OMG thanx you sooo much
i think thats the kewlest thing anybody ever said about me an Saturday i'll be 16 so yah technically i am older 
i think my muse knew Joan of Ark 
its really funny but sometimes when i write a poem its almost like its bein channeled through me an im just watching it happen. does that make sense?
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Amen!
Young people are just too image driven these days. It's all about the latest fashion trends, or who your friends are or, or other stupid stuff like that. What ever happened to being yourself? Thanks for sharing those thoughts, young poet.
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A very intriguing piece of rhyme and flow. The observation of society and stereotypical thought - spinning a web of its own illusions...
"assuming the martyrs roll so they can shop an sell the poses"
.. great line here - very entailed, the depth ..
"all this time they've no reflection to see the way their life exposes "
.. this is such a thought provoking statement - and so true ..
Such a clever title.. and expressive piece of sophisticated slang so to speak. Very nice.
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Interesting. I likeee it. a new phrase that I haven't heard before: shop and sell the poses. cool.
"so they can shop an sell the poses " this has like 9 syllables when the contrasting line had more than 14, what happened here?
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