The cobweb spun of utter confusion
Poor fly, but the luck of the spider
Hiss, chomp, wait again
No feeling in the black widows heart
As it devours anything it desires,
Crawling through the depth of night
Hiding its skeletons in the shadows
He breaks her heart,
twists it into two pieces
Duct tape cannot heal it this time
She cries tears that the rain cannot hide
She feels the pain as if it pierced venom
But the black widow does not care
Spin another cobweb,
Leave the remains of a heart to rot
Forgotten, alone and broken
The fly with broken wings
Will it heal anew?
Author notes
eh.. an odd way to describe heartbreak.
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- write me a web of words. by deadpixie020.
700 points, ended September 11, 2008, 20 entries
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wow
that was bloody amazing. Jolly good write
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The cobweb spun of utter confusion
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As it devours anything it desires,
Crawling through the depth of night
Hiding its skeletons in the shadows
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i looove those !
the wording is wonderful
i also really liked the second stanza
best of luck in the contest
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Forgotten, alone and broken
The fly with broken wings
Will it heal anew?
I love the metaphor
it's very very unique! -
Kool
yeah it is kinda odd way to describe heartbreak... but i still kinda like it ^_^ keep it up
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