I watch as your lips meet hers
and your hands slide onto her waist
My heart weeps
but I cannot erase this image from my eyes
I am far from my comfort zone
your arms
because they have found a new home
I turn to an empty world
One that consisted of you and I
One that revolved around you
but now include only me
Author notes
Me and my BF of 3 months just broke up, and after a week he has already found someone new. I feel completely broken...shattered to peices so small that nobody can see them, or me for that matter.
XBeautifulTragedyX
A contest entry
- contemporary emotional personal poetry♥ by etoile.
575 points, ended October 19, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
-
this was really sad and emotional. I really liked the imagery you used to write this piece. the beginning was really captivating and made me want to read more.
'One that consisted of you an i' the ending should be 'and I'
sorry, it's a pet peeve of mine when the 'I' isn't capitilized.
thanks for entering and goodluck
-
I am far from my comfort zone
your arms
because they have found a new home
that's written quite well.
very sad though.
overall, I liked this. -
screen-name in authors notes please.
and I'll do a real comment later. -
i like this one, so full of emotion. i could definatly feel it. great write!
Adding your comment:
