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Oblivion

Broken and battered

by your bladed bidding.

My beautiful blue world

bursting into bedlam.
A bright blaze burning

into bleak

            ...oblivion.

 

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Contest by Sacred Serenity - MOODS: used.

Contest by iamlost - Option 4, word bank: beautiful, broken, blue, blade, bright.

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  • Rock-Junkie
    August 31, 2008

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    a different view of being in oblivion. interesting... really good though! great job and good luck in my contest!!


  • Quill Bill
    August 16, 2008

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    i like sort powerfull poems i'm not sure this poem is dark enough to express oblivion but i enjoyed it.


  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    I love the alliteration! Especially how oblivion, though it doesn't start with "b" keeps that sound and therefore strengthens the poem. I was really hoping someone would do this with this option, this is a beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest!