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Our Magical Moment

 

 

 

 

My darling sit a while with me

let's watch the morning sun rise 

above the trees and mountaintops

 

let's share this glass of wine

and reminisce of the wonderful times

that we have shared together

 

hold my hand against your heart

and look deep into my eyes

tell me what you are feeling deep within

 

let's take this moment

as we unwind and express

all that we feel for each other

 

hold me close as the powerful wind breaks 

let's make this beautiful morning

last for all of eternity

 

if you look beyond those treetops ahead

you'll see Heaven's angels as they dance

celebrating the birth of a new day

 

close your eyes and you'll hear them

as they sing their joy and praise

let's get lost in the magic of their beautiful voices

 

see the majestic eagles as they soar

it's amazing how their mighty wings

just seem to embrace the entire horizon

 

they leave me breathless

as I sit here and admire each one

their beautiful colors reflect the rising sun

 

there's a colorful rainbow forming

against that rough mountainside

it touches me and let's me know that we are alright

 

as I look into your emerald eyes

there is something that I want you to know

that deep inside of my heart I will always treasure you

 

no one could ever take your place

or make me fall out of love with you

I adore everything that makes you, you

 

thank you for sharing this magical moment with me

and for always being by my side whenever I need you

you truly are an amazing woman inside and out

 

I will never forget this special day

and the way that I feel right now

I am forever yours, I love you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    November 21
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    omg...wow!! I see why this has so many golds. This is magically beautiful!!


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    November 21
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    thank you for sharing this magical moment with me
    and for always being by my side whenever I need you
    you truly are an amazing woman inside and out

    I will never forget this special day
    and the way that I feel right now
    I am forever yours, I love you

    Loved these two stanzas. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • littlegirlapril
    November 21
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    this is a wonderful poem. it really reaches down into your heart. so nice. thank you for entering

    <3littlegirl


  • Darkmoon
    November 14
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    This is a good poem. Sweet and full of emotion. She's lucky to have a sweet guy like you. This poem reminds me of what i would sya to my boyfriend but i would change woman to man. *laughs* Anyway this is a really sweet peom. Good luck and thanks for the entry.

  • JToddUnderhill
    November 9

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    Three????

    and yet you are running it again to try and get a 4th gold cup for this poem? I thought it well written and the picture made this one as well. I would like to know where that sunset is. I am guessing Califoria.


  • zee91190
    November 4

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    A very lovely write indeed.It looks like you really have spent a lot of time on this peice here. I can see your hardwork has paid off.
    To fall in love is such a beautiful thing. And to stay that way is even more so. I really like the way you have brought out the beauty of so many other things and yet you never deviated from the original theme and what you had to say.
    The picture you have managed to paint is so vivid and intricate it amazes me.
    "no one could ever take your place
    or make me fall out of love with you
    I adore everything that makes you, you" Its absolutely lovely when you love a person for who they are and never try to change them. Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing this with me

    All the best

  • this is a good poem, love the pic at the begining those really catch my eye and and the reflection is even better thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Symphony
    February 16

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    This was so beautiful -

    It was like you managed to put love into words, which people always say can't be done

    At first, while I was reading, I thought it was saying that the narrotor was having a glass of wine, whilst overlooking this spectacular view - but that the person he/she was addressing, had passed on -

    Good to find it wasn't. Beautiful write; such vibrant imagery!

    Thank you for entering


  • RedAquarius
    January 26
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    A very love-filled and descriptive piece.


  • Umi Juvariel
    January 19

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    I thought this was sweet and well written. The picture was gorgeous and suited it. Great job, and good luck in my contest!

  • it was interesting!


  • trekkergirl
    January 3

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    wow congrats on all the gold trophies. I do say this wonderful write does deserve them. You are as always a wonderful writer. Love this. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for placing it into our reading list.


  • Topaze gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    A fine piece my friend, my best wishes.


  • echo-ink
    December 30, 2008

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    A beautiful tribute to the one you love, this was wonderfully written and was full of heart-felt feelings as you shared love on a beautiful morning with your love and the angels.
    Thanks for entering.

  • Abnormal
    December 30, 2008

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    This is such a romantic poem! It was touching and well-written. I usually read poems a little shorter, but this was amazing! Well done, good luck and thanks for entering!


  • doolie gold member
    December 25, 2008

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    So much love and emotion. I love your write. It reached right out and touched my heart. Many more golds coming your way. Merry Christmas.


  • Maxboy gold member
    December 25, 2008

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    Wow!!!  This is absolutely beautiful, such a heartfelt and romantic write. Congratulations on all the Golds, so well deserved.

    Best wishes in the contest.


  • yourbentangel
    December 19, 2008

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    Wow, you took both very seriously, I almost didn't allow prewrites and I am glad that I did. This was amazing and I just gave a little piece of my heart to you. There were a couple of things that you said here that I have heard before. Once from one of the greatest loves of my life. Someone I could never or ever want to forget because he showed me what being in love really felt like. Recently from a man that has proven to me that true love can and will last, he has shown me this in just a matter of mere months and to know that you feel this way about an amazing woman really warms my heart!!! isn't it good to be in love?

  • piccola silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    wow either your poetry is really good or you have a lot of friends. this was great; I like the imagery and the graphic you chose. thank you for entering

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    Thank you for your most sensually beautiful entry, Josie


  • tawk gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    I have read this beautiful and heartfelt piece before. Just amazing in everyway. I just love it. Congrats on all the Golds well deserved my dear friend. hugs Theresa


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    YOu feasted us with this poem!
    What a pleasure it was to sip it in and simply
    enjoy the splendor and fragrance of it!
    well done! well done!
    ears/Seattle BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Oh Jeremy, how your words wrap around my heart warming me with such beautiful poetry.You write from deep within your heart and this is why the reader can feel your emotions within your write.You are always a pleasure to read, you have the heart and voice of an angel, your caring of others is seen whin your written words.I am honored to have you as a friend, and a very caring one at that!
    May you always have an angel walking beside you, and the love that you give out to others, comes back to you!
    blessings to you sweet soul,
    your AP angel friend,
    Angel-anne.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    October 11, 2008
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    sorry about that lol...little tired...great write indeed

  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    WOW

    Though it went past the line rule, I will not DQ you for this is a brilliant piece of work. I can see that this contest will be hard to judge. Beautiful work and best of luck in my contest, Yours in poetry, gypsy

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    I think that this is a lovely piece thank you for taking the time to enter best wishes to you in my contest be well

  • PamelaP
    October 10, 2008

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    This flows really well. I love the wroding, and the love pouring from it.
    Well done and good luck
    Pam


  • BehindTheShadow
    October 2, 2008
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    Such a splendid story of love! Great job!


  • offlimits
    September 30, 2008
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    wow i am breathless i love it welldone
    and good luck in the contest


  • Asylaarix
    September 11, 2008

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    Have I told you that you are amazing?! at least lately anyway?! lol ... I loved this babe. You really know how to turn something beautiful into something AMAZINGLY beautiful. I LOVE YOU!

    ~Chantelle


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 28, 2008

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    no one could ever take your place
    or make me fall out of love with you
    I adore everything that makes you, you

    This was so touching. These 3 lines were even more emotional and heartfelt! Wonderful job and good luck!


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Such a beautiful dedication to love and all that it implies, well done on setting such a beautiful scene in the readers mine and filling the heart with united sighs. Best to you


  • HeavensDaughter
    August 18, 2008

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    This is beautiful! Thank you for sharing it. What an uplifting poem about love. I really enjoyed reading it.

    Abigail

  • tawk gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    What a beautiful and heartfelt love poem. This is how I feel about my soul mate my Jason. We are truly very lucky people. Wonderful imagery and emotion throughout. Congrats on the Gold's well deserved. Theresa

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 15, 2008
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    Hello Jeremy0826. Congratulations on the Gold Trophy, it is a remarkable write. My regards.


    • Jeremy0826 silver member
      August 15, 2008
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      Thank you very much Ace! I appreciate it and am glad that you enjoyed it so much!




      Jeremy0826


  • Nicada silver member
    August 15, 2008
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    I see I commented on this before and I still love it! Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 14, 2008

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    Hello.

    Very romantic and picturesque; you are bordering on the sickly sweet I have to say, but then love does that to the best of us, hahahaa. And I can appreciate a man showing his heart and soul to his woman, as it should be. It reads like a dream from start to finish, so I can't say if this is real or not, and you did win a Gold in an imagination contest, so it is hard to say. If it is real, sounds fantastic, if it isn't, hope it comes true some day.

    Only thing I would say is punctuation and capitals, but then I am strict on that, ahhaah. Overall, a dream of a moment. I wish you well in the contest.

    My regards.

  • Nicada silver member
    August 11, 2008

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    Beautifully Written!

    This is a wonderful and heartwarming poem here! Great job on this, and it is filled with such honest emotion and love. What a deep and insightful write this is! I am very touched! Best of luck to you in the contest, but I don't think you need it. Blessings, Patty


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Very nice, and almost too beautiful and romantic to be believe. I hope that this wasn't only your imagination, and that you really have a love such as this. Either way, it was nice - a dream or reality!


  • Re-invention silver member
    August 7, 2008
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    awww so romantic anc full of true love.. I enjoyed it.. nicely penned!


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    This is nothing short of beautiful. Such a romantic piece that any lady would love to have written about her. This was fantastic.


  • parntsoftwins
    August 6, 2008
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    this is absolutely beautiful. each and every line screams pure joy and love. All too often we race through life and forget to stop and enjoy the beauty and love surrounding us. This poem reminds us how magnificent the world and our loves are, and we should never forget to stop and enjoy them. Thank you~Nikki


  • Age of Rain
    August 6, 2008
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    So very beautiful. You captured the essence of love in this very well written poem. Well done.


  • XBeautiful MistakeX
    August 5, 2008

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    Ok wow. Talk about one LUCKY lady! how I wish I was her, to have someone love me so. Jeremy you have a way with words, almost orgasmic!

     

    no one could ever take your place

    or make me fall out of love with you

    I adore everything that makes you, you

     

    How I wait for that day for someone to repeat those words to me.

    Great work here love.

    Honest and true

    Beautiful, thats you!

     

    Oz

     

    CLAPPIES!! 

     

     


  • Riamh
    August 5, 2008
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    That's incredibly beautiful

    I loved this poem....it shouts your love and does so..so beautifully. well done!


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Breathtaking

    Oh how wonderfully beautiful and touching this is!
    Sigh....
    Can the heart speak with any more depth? I think not!
    So absolutely gorgeous this is, hon!!!
    I wish you the very best of luck in this contest; I think it more than deserves gold


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 5, 2008
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    A great piece of extended writing in the vein created by the picture prompt, so well done you. Must say though that (being of a somewhast lowish turn of mind,) the line about breaking wind just felt out of place, and, in truth, cracked me up! Sorry about that, it's me not you.


  • smonte19124 gold member
    August 4, 2008
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    I forgot your applause

  • smonte19124 gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Be still my heart! Your loved one is truly blessed to have someone who feel like this and able to share it so beautifully. Throughout the entire composition the imagery is amazing. Good luck in the contest


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    August 4, 2008

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    Nice take on the image prompt...Not much on the lovey dovey ...
    more into the darker stuff, but this is a good one...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Aww.. beautiful words are often best keep simple, genuine and heartfelt. Exactly what this piece is. Very romantic!


  • Todays Poem Box
    August 4, 2008
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    Excellent.

  • norahlogan silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    wonderful!

    Jeremy,
    I am certainly jealous of the lady with emerald eyes! Such a glowing tribute to your ladylove.
    The poem and image go hand in hand.
    Good job and good luck in the contest!


  • Angel Felice Seals
    August 4, 2008
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    wow

    I really loved this full of emotions and passion. I could feel the love you have for this person


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    this is absolutely beautiful
    Best wishes to you hon in the contest

    love
    Passions

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