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Never Again

I can't believe you left me
I am very sad
I can't believe you left me
You were all I had.

Living up to you was hard
But I loved you just the same
Living up to you was hard
To only find it was a game

I gave you all I had
To you i was a toy
I gave you all I had
It never brought you joy

Sleeping in the dark
All alone with you
Sleeping in the dark
Lashing out was nothing new

I am very scared
I love him way to much
I am very scared
I will miss his warm rough touch

For him to leave me
I guess it was right
For him to leave me
Never again be held tight

Never again will he hurt me
Never will he be in my life.
Never again will I love him
Never again shall I be his wife.

And never again will I be hurt
Never again shall I bleed
Never again shall we love
Now forever in eternity.

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  • Heroesrox
    February 19

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    This brought tears to my eyes. It's so true and is jam packed with emotions! Thanks so much for sharing this one here with us! It should hasve won something in the various contests that it's in! IT NEEDS GOLD!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 17, 2008

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    gave you all I had
    To you i was a toy
    I gave you all I had
    It never brought you joy

    God, my marriage written out. Great write hun


  • LittleDecoy
    August 5, 2008
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    i liked the repitition of a line in every stanza.
    i haven't seen that too often.
    loved the emotion behind it.. it was really touching.
    i'm sorry you had to go through something like this, i can't imagine it would be any fun.
    great job. thanks for entering. and good luck in my contest. =)


  • echo-ink
    August 5, 2008

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    This was sad.

    I hope it wasn't true. if it is, your bettr off without him, he doesn't sound very nice. Thanks for entering and good luck. PL


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008
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    A very emotional and touching piece indeed. The feeling of rejection and heartbreak is a terrible thing! But then writing about it in a beautiful way is amazing! I did feel that some of the lines in this piece were forced rhyme, and when you force something into making it fit, it kinda throws the poem out of balance. But other than that, great job and good luck!!!


  • amandapoet15
    August 4, 2008

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    wow this is really good. i like how you say its a free write. it flows perfectly.keep up the good work. i can't wait to read more of your poetry.


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 4, 2008
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    wow, a big tear jerker

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