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Pain In Dreaming

Hating you
Made
Hurting because of you
So much easier

You broke me
And bent me
Tried to twist me
Into something
That wouldn't shame you

It doesn't mean anything anymore

I want to not think of you anymore

To not dream of you anymore

But dreams are fruitless as you can see

They
Like you
Only ruin me.

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  • aanika
    August 3, 2008

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    Hating you
    Made
    Hurting because of you
    So much easier

    i think everyone can relate to this.
    the last stanza could use a couple of commas,
    but other than that,
    great write


  • Andy Stephenson
    August 3, 2008

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    Hi

    This seems pretty good. Someone broke up with you? Sorry to hear. (wasn't) (dreams) This is a good little poem. I'm glad you are writing again.

    Andy