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The Dreamer

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Taking herself up to her chamber,
Dreading Every Minuite Of what shes About To Encounter,
Because she knows just how much threat it poses to her life,
And the people around her.

As she falls onto the silk sheets,
And her head hits the pillow,
she drifts into a dreary darkness,

and now shes seeing through someone elses eyes,
and she sees the terror on her lovers face,
and the 'Oh so Peaceful' look that follows
As he slowly looses oxygen,
When she looks to what is causing it,
She sees her own hand,
But shes not in command of it anymore

And as his head fell limp, the hands that were once yours,
Lie him down genlty where you were laid just a few minuites ago.

And the body she once controled, Carrys on down the stairs, toward the exit,
The front door,
and the dog you loved comes to greet you,
It's pushed aside, with more force than you could ever expect of yourself,
And as your eyes wander away from the dog, hurtling toward the plaster wall,
your ears detect the sickening crack of bones,
And the yelp of your beloved dog,
as its neck is snapped,
and its life is ended,

And as you reach for that doorhandle,
You snap back into focus, and you are yourself again,
To make sure, you flex your fingers, and they do as you say,
And as you look around, you realise you are laid next to your dead lover.
And the salty sweet tears flow,
as you cradle his head in your arms,
begging for him to wake up, for it just to be another dream,
But the bruising on his neck, is proof of your nightmare.

Soak it up honey, This is what you are now.
Dont deny it, and dont try to stop it.
Because in the end, I Am you.

Author notes

'mazbaby' inspired this poem, her words; "-an encounter with danger in a dream-"
I dont think i grasped the whole concept of danger IN her dream,
But the danger outside is Oh so real.

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  • xeroabyss II
    July 12

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    This pretty trippy.
    Seeing the demon hatred inside you manifest to take control of your dreams to show you what it wishes.
    I'd never sleep again (and i love to sleep)


  • Ginger Woods
    December 5, 2008

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    This is amazing, it reminded me of Edgar Allen Poe's black cat, in which the husband was so angry he sank an axe into his own wife's skull. Very disurbing I absaloutly loved it.


  • z etoile
    August 18, 2008

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    wow what a dark dark poem....
    this was creative I liked it keep writing and thank you for sharing.

  • whatami
    August 12, 2008

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    It's cool. Nice how you write from different views. You've got loose thoughts in this poem, I think you should try to gather them together. You have also have lots of spelling mistakes, sorry I had to point that out. Nice ending. Thanks, check mine out too please? Great job.


  • Genesis
    August 5, 2008

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    Interesting. I'm not use to such a read. It was sort of awkward, I thought, having first, second, and third person points of view throughout the poem. But, I think it adds to the effect. It's transformed from an event the reader is watching to a more personal event. Thank you for sharing.
    --Genesis.

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