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Embedded Goodbye

 

 

 

Searching for her shadow

upon the lost souls

of darkness and bitter goodbyes

 

She bleeds internally

for a second chance at life

but dwells on the cold distance

she calls home

 

Parched with embedded broidery

bleached upon her blackened lips

asking for salvation through the night

 

Bubbles forming at her lips

the words slipping out as if

greased from her tongue

 

She struggles hard to dwindle

her luminescent chocolate eyes fade

as blood stained skylines evade

 

Pinpoint pricks of crimson

dance gleefully all around

as she walks the hallways of sadness

 

As if to see her truest self

one final time before sun full sets

she bleeds her final bloody tears 

Goodbye 

 

 

Author notes

Picture Credit: bluvictorian
Picture by witchywoman_328 @ Photobucket.com

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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 21, 2008

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    Wow, this is brilliant and well thought
    out! I love all of the imagery and the
    way that you brought this picture to life
    with your words here! I can't believe that
    you only got an HM for this one! Thanks
    a lot for sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    WOW! this is poem is brilliant. you have captured her extremely well. Absolutely outstanding poem that you've written. a place I used to reside in, but no longer. emotions that I can totally relate to. this piece hit close to home.

    this is beyond words that I could even begin to try to say. I love this poem and you brought her to life

    excellent job

    good luck

    kat


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    wow sweetie I really do admire the depth and the meaning to your words as they contain such power that brings and adds life to the picture. I truly love this your amazing.