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An Echo In These Halls

Resounding footsteps echo

retracing futures past,

lost words upon the page

yesterdays fruit...

 

 

 in halls of wanton mind

 

 

 

Forbidden memories dwell

emotions run the gamut,

forever we are no more

just lingering echoes

 

 

 

in halls of wanton mind

 

 

 

Syllables once treasures

now feathers in the wind

gone is all that was

swallowed within the cracks

 

in halls of wanton mind~

Author notes

Option 2. An Echo In These Halls by Poets2angels used as inspiration

http://allpoetry.com/poem/4087571

Thanks...... Frogzter

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  • word20dragon
    August 27, 2008

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    Great Write

    everyones mind is wanting for something it could be knowledge, peace, clear thinking, finding understanding. For me my mind wants to over come depression. I have goten it undercontrole now with meds and a great doc. Also praying and writing help get the blues on the run so I can relate to this poem well.


  • Samplette gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    Oh my..this is an awesome piece of poetry. It takes this readers breath away. It is haunting, yet beautifully so. Excellent write.
    Sam


    • Frogzter gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thanks so much Sam! Always a pleasure to hear from you! I hope all is well!

      Much love,

      Frogz~


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    August 10, 2008
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    omg, that's like... awesomely worded. ^^ great job ^^


  • klassy lassy
    August 5, 2008
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    Ah the things that we do that we would not, and the things we would forget that we can not. And the things we remember that leave us wistful for the past...Yet, we learn, and without memory it would simply be a momentary existance without much dimension.

    This is a very interesting write.

  • goalsv
    August 3, 2008
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    A beautiful write. Very intriguing.

    • Frogzter gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      Thank you! Free verse is a bit out of my league! So thanks


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Beautifully written!

    I love this line so much!

    "Syllables once treasures
    now feathers in the wind"

    SIgh~

    Thank you for using my poem for inspiration! I am so honored..


    I want to take this time to thank you for being one of my favorites and for being so kind and supportive since I first met you here on AP!
    Ty for taking the time to enter! It means so much to me!


    Lynda


    • Frogzter gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      Thanks for the lovely comments! I almost didn't post this because I really suck at free verse...lol, but wanted to give it a shot. This is one of only a handful I've written ever... (too scared to get out of the box)


  • Frozentearz
    August 3, 2008

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    mmm your words make me feel that endless echo.
    sigh...sometimes It is like a re-run over and over as the halls of the wanton mind for-ever speak...
    well done my Dear poet and best ofluck to you in the contest.
    Blessings.
    Sister
    Tearz


    • Frogzter gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      Thanks sis, you know I am not much on free verse, so I didn't think this would fly, but I posted it anyway! Lol... out of my comfort zone for sure... what no rhyme? Whats up with that?

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