It has been six months
Months, I never want to go away
I just want to show her that I love her
I don't want to break what's good
I am ready to enter ecstacy
Will she be ready with me?
I care enough for her
To wait
Until the time is right
So many decisions
For the both of us
I'm not the pressuring type
I just want to be her Mr. Right
But I will understand and be patient
It's worth waiting for
She's my Mrs. Right
Smart, beautiful, loveable
I wonder what's on her mind?
Are there any issues?
Maybe we need to talk some more
To get a better understanding
For our needs and desires
Our love is strong
Will this make our bond stronger?
Either way, we will move together
I don't want to make her uncomfortable
Or embarassed in any way
I don't want to disturb her privacy
It's only natural for her to worry
We need to talk
About her concerns
Go somewhere relaxing
And share things
If we are too shy
We should wait it out
I will still love her
And will wait for her
I want our story to be a happy ending
Author notes
I am a 24 year old male
In my experience, the only advice I give is ...to move together and have lots of communication on this topic. I'm not saying to go out and make love, I'm not saying not to. Move together and talk about it. Talk about your concerns, pressures, anxieties, any embarassments you may think you will have. If either of you are shy in any way, then it is best to wait until the time is right. The right time is when you are ready and not shy about the topic.
A contest entry
- The First Time... by trista.
700 points, ended September 7, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Let's hope you will have a happy ending David. I know that day will come. Good write, to the Mr. Right of Poetry!
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Bravo Very Well Done
Yes sir, I am 51 and I could not agree more, with all the instant gradification going on something as intimate and important should be thought out and waited on. We have put way too much pressure on the youth of today they need to slow down they have the rest of their lives to be an adult. I know there are days I wish I had some youthful innocence back. Thanks, Boog
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Thanks, I appreciate your comment
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Holy freaking hell!
Yup, I like this one.
I sorta feel like everyone thinks I'm naive about this, I really do. Maybe they're right. But whatever. To be honest, I'm one of the most careful people when it comes to relationships, ever.
Do you know how long it took me to tell him that I loved him? I was only scared about getting hurt.
But... I do love him, now. And I can say that without wondering if he feels the same way, because he does.
Let's see...
I liked how it's from a guys point of view. That's awesome. Talking about "things" is huge. HUGE. You make that important in the poem.
I think I'm happy to say that we do talk about everything. He's made it clear that he'd never push me to do something (especially sex). He's never invaded my privacy. He's just respectful about everything, and I think that makes it easier for me. So, I guess it's sort of my decision. He's already made his. I don't feel rushed at all even if I know he's waiting for me.
I like the second stanza best.
The entire poem was good, and full of advice.
Sincerely,
sarah ~
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Thanks so much Sarah. Only yourself knows, what it is you want. This applies to everyone. Being picky with a relationship is fine, i'm the same way. I don't want to hurt, I want to be happy .. so why not wait. As long as you are happy and ok with waiting .. I'm sure the wait will be worth while. Thanks for understanding my write, greatly appreciated
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An amazing poem and your best freewrite yet. And I really like how you aren't in any rush and you can wait for your Miss. Right lol. By the way if you don't mind me asking.. who is this about??... keep penning
♥always Kate
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This doll was for the contest .. and what the guy might be going through ... like I was at his age. I kind of used my relationship I had at a young age for an example this was strictly for advice, I hope it helps
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Hi there!
Wow, great job of expressing this from a young man’s perspective! And, I enjoyed reading your AN almost as much as the poem. It really is a wonderful point that both people should be able to talk about this and not have any questions or embarrassments. I was in my 20’s before I met a man I could talk to about anything and everything...all the “stupid” questions I’d wondered about for years, and not once did he laugh or act like I should have known. Those long conversations are a big part of what drew us so incredibly close. The young woman I’m so concerned about tells me all the time how she and her boyfriend can and do talk about “everything”, so I’ll be very interested to see what she thinks of your poem and advice too. Yours might be the first entry that doesn’t outright say “wait”, so I’m sure she’ll appreciate that, too. 
I also like the advice about "moving together" and being sure you're growing in the same direction and at the same level. I think that's especially true when you're young and things change so quickly.
Thanks so much for taking the time to share your views and thoughts. You sound like you have some good advice and wisdom behind your years, and I’m sure some lucky girl will find you to most definitely be her “Mr. Right”
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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Thanks so much doll, I appreciated your comment very much. I do have some experience with woman and relationships, so I hope my advice helps your friend
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you are so right. while i believe you should wait till marriage, i know that not everyone feels that way. and that's fine, but i also believe that if either one has doubts then now is not the time. both people need to be completely and totally ready.
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Exactly ... move together .. whether its for having it .. or not .. move at the same level .. and that bond will stay true
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You sound like a caring person and you are right -- you should wait until the time is right for both of you. It should mean something.
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yeah ... time won't rust ... plenty of times to talk things through
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Wow this is so sweet if a guy would be like this you know he is a keeper. I am not the type to immediately have sex when i am in a relationship. I think just because you have done it before doesnt mean you rush into it again....because you can never get back that first time. I loved your words here and if this is actually a true story then this girl is very lucky. I am still looking for my mr. right dont need to find him just yet, i kind of want it to be a surprise and i actually want to strive to be his mrs. right. I just havent found any worthy candidates in that way at least lol. loved this poem.
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Thanks I wrote this in a guy's point of view in a new relationship.
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wow nicely done bae.. I love it.. the message is so pure in here..nice job!
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Thanks My Love Villain .. it was hard to give advice through a poem ... hehe
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Hi David. Hope things will go well this go around. Nice message in this..I know you will be the perfect Mr. Right no matter what. THANKS again David!!
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Thanks Pat!
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