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Words For Women

Read your poetry books
naked in bed

it is the way they
were meant to be read

throw away
the lipstick

you don’t need to be
colored with crayons

make your vows to
the earth

throw your prayers
up to the moon

 

if they go further

you are blessed

 

say what you feel
and if no one gets it

move on

tease time into a corner
then walk away

make your own rules
with heart

never forget
you became a woman

at birth.

Author notes

Prompt: Beauty within

dedicated to my friend, Robin

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  • Emmyb gold member
    July 5
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    different to your usual style but very enjoyable


  • bonjourbunnie
    May 3

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    I love it. The whole thing is a beautifully crafted anthem to women every where. It sings out the true spirit of what makes a woman beautiful.

    I love the line about being colored with crayons. It's imagery is wonderful and it encompasses more than it seems to at first reading.

    Thank you for entering, and good luck.


  • zochit2me gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    I am glad to see this won something Lane...



    Love it!!!

    ♥Becky♥


  • A60sMan
    December 22, 2008

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    I thought this piece caught the concept of "strong independent modern woman" very well, Lane. Unfortunately, you were really up against a very strong field. Bronze was the best I could do. Thank you for entering my contest, it was a wonderful read. :-)


  • A60sMan
    December 22, 2008
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    I think this woman sleeps on nails. Adding to the finalists,

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    Kudos...

    Seamless.Timeless. Empowering. Words for all Women. Poetry in notion and notion in poetry. Simply beautifully written and yet not simple.


  • Legend silver member
    September 17, 2008

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    And what thanks i give that they were made woman at birth.I so belive all that is said here there is no need for any woman to feel she has to conform to that which is around her.My dear wife never wore a lick of makeup from the day we met She was in these eyes the most beautiful lady in the world A wonderful piece
    Excellent


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 15, 2008
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    Very encouraging and well written. A most enjoyable read!

    Frogz~


  • Samplette gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    This does encourage. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • Rclane gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Inner beauty the substance and strength of character that defines the person without from within. Nicely done...


  • Kelli Marie
    August 15, 2008

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    This is a very interesting take on the "prompt" A nicely written piece of poetry. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Kelli


  • Gratitude
    August 14, 2008
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    You don't need to be coloured with crayons...

    LOVE THIS! I hardly ever wear makeup, who's with me? *grins* You're so right, Delaney. It's the little things that make a difference, and making peace with ourselves. Stunning write that hits the nail on the head. I hope this makes it into print so that far more women see it.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Isn't this so true, you hit the nail on the head here, if we can't do these things we need to go back and teach ourselves how.


  • Sesheta
    August 8, 2008

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    Flawlessly captured prompt.

    My favorite lines:

    it is the way they
    were meant to be read

    you don’t need to be
    colored with crayons

    say what you feel
    and if no one gets it
    move on

    tease time into a corner
    then walk away

    never forget
    you became a woman
    at birth

    In short, the entire poem. Amazing, as is always anticipated!


  • sultan gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    Supple, Warm, Powerful...

    ... come to mind as my first impressions about this poem. I like the building images of freedom. Even though the ‘making rules by your heart’ is a little scary to me ... it’s also tantalizing. I also like the way you wove in the notion of timelessness of female aspects in these lines: “tease time into a corner, then walk away” and “you became a woman, at birth”. Your beauty is all over this piece. Bravo! Thank you, Sultan


  • Cole
    August 6, 2008

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    When you begin a poem with constant meter and rhyme, it's weird when it goes away. Also, this seems like the mantra of a girl, not a woman.

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 7, 2008
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      there was no constant meter or rhyme...and if you feel it sounded like a mantra for a girl then great...all girls need to feel special. thanks for the read.


  • Age of Rain
    August 4, 2008

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    I was told to read you by my dear Friend Sailor Ptolema. And I must say, I'm glad I did not refuse her divine mandate. You are FANTASTIC! And I mean that from the depths of my being. Brill stuff here!

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 7, 2008
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      our little "sailor" is a wonderful poetess in her own right, and I am thrilled she thinks enough of my poetry to send readers my way. Thank you so much for your kind words and applause Love, Lane


  • sailor ptolema
    August 4, 2008

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    opps forgot the little clappies that look like they're flagging down jets

  • sailor ptolema
    August 4, 2008
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    Oh man, I felt this . It's exactly what I needed to read. I love how you cultivate words into beauty.... . Makes me wish I knew more people like you.

    ~Meg


  • Mallig gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    I love this, how inspiring and empowering!
    "tease time into a corner
    then walk away" that's great.


  • tomisb
    August 3, 2008

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    Damn
    Love,
    Tom


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    indeed, inner beauty, the two most beautiful women I know, while they are both beautiful on the outside, very much so....it's their inner beauty which gives them that
    extra special glitter, like the brightest firefly's in
    the night's meadow. and these two are one's who'd NEVER be caught in a mason jar, anymore than one could catch a moonbeam. A lot of truth...and beauty to this write of yours...a while lot.



    Len


  • ravensgift
    August 3, 2008

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    Beautiful and inspirational! Now I feel like running naked in the woods


  • Cannonsfire
    August 3, 2008

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    From a woman who knows Love, C


  • daviscth silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    Another awesome piece as only you can create it my dear. Best wishes in the contest.


  • IronMaiden1236
    August 3, 2008
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    I give up!!

    Thank You!!! I am prostrate at your feet!!!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    August 3, 2008

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    Almost forgot

    tease time into a corner
    then walk away... Now that is a damm fine line. Wish I had written it.
    Joe
    some more bunnies for you.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    August 3, 2008
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    Ooooo.

    Now where did I put that book of poetry?? Can I come for a visit Lane?
    Joe


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      ............Joe, you are always
      welcome here

  • zochit2me gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    you have some damn fine lines in this Lane...
    too many to mention but just know they had an effect on me to get naked and read my poetry books bare-assed and proud!!!

    You are so brilliant! And so much a WOMAN!!!

    ♥Becky♥

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      Thank you so much, Becky I want women to know they are special...so many on this site do not feel this way about themselves. Lane


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Brilliant and poignant words for women indeed! Your write made me feel very empowered! Wonderful Lane!


  • PerVirtuous
    August 3, 2008
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    YAY for women! Gotta love 'em. Have some bunnies.


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      ...shuffling bunnies off to the boat....no room left in the house

  • Shayla Walker
    August 3, 2008
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    I hear a woman roaring,is that you Dalaney!!!


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      yep, it's me Thank you so much for reading and for the applause

      Love, Lane

  • mcfreeman
    August 3, 2008
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    Stunning!!


  • Swan song gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    lol you are just soooo good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      why thank you, sir. lol...your laugh is contagious xxoo


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    'Tease time into a corner-' now that is what I call a line!
    Take me away dear Lane!!!
    Hilly xxx


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      hi Hilly Grab your poetry books and lets go!

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    I love your poetry


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      and there is no one on this site who loves your poetry more than me, my friend. Love to you, Lane


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Boffo!

    ... and then some.
    I love this piece, Lane.
    And every poem in my book was written with the idea that a beautiful woman would read it naked in bed.

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      I would love to read one of your books.

      anywhere.


      Love to you, Lane

      PS: thank you for the BUFFO and the applause


  • Olivias Violin
    August 3, 2008

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    Great!


  • The Unknown Poet1
    August 3, 2008
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    women=creativity=life


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      yes, it does, sweet Poet....
      thank you for reading me.

      love, lane


  • BehindTheShadow
    August 3, 2008
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    Words of empowerment, I love it...

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      i think we need more words like these in our lives....i hope i touch at least a few with mine. Thank you so much for reading and for the applause Love, Lane


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    Sometimes you simply drop in a sublime truth, kc, and take my breath away.


  • Amera gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Oh my! I love this! It’s not only fluid to read but it’s beautiful and filled with the wisdom of an older woman. “errr….. you know what I mean”

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      older woman? well, yes, I guess at 36 I am a bit wiser But, as I wrote....you are a woman at birth Love, Lane


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 3, 2008
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