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Impromptu - Sonnet LXXXVI

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How death has probed nonentity somehow,

That further infiltrates what never seems

Whilst lying undisturbed in worthy dreams

Exonerate the wishes I’d allow. 

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If Faith were instrumental to His grace,

The altitude would nonetheless be horst

With make–do innuendos reinforced,

In search of the ideal a blessed place.

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To sample the most spiritual arcane,

Those effigies from such the human kind

Contain no less investitures of mind,

To breathe in new existences again.

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If dreams were in denial one would say,

I raise it in awareness everyday.

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I am in the dark yet not lost in it...Unknown

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  • Pmel
    August 12, 2008

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    Too deep for me to understand, me thinks.

    I do however love the last two line:


    If dreams were in denial one would say,
    I raise it in awareness everyday.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    Humm..so true and so much open thought to bring the depth of this life...well done..I love it...and my thanks for sharing it with me...


  • JinSays gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Dreams are not disciplined, therefore, they don't know whether what is taking place is good or bad.
    The blessed place is not a place, but a frame of mind. Home. Where is home?
    My home is real and its not good or bad, evil or altruistic.
    My home is a state of mind where I don't need to differentiate.

    Human folly doesn't come in shades of sleeping dreams.
    It's sitting inside of our conscious thought and lies low in unconscious desires. Innuendo can be a self-deluding crutch we punish ourselves with, but blaming a desire for wanting and needing more and bettr in your life is not a mistake, and so should not be treated as such.
    I felt the need to come back and re-read this poem, I felt I was unfair the first time.
    You have done a splendid job here,
    best wishes in your contest,
    My best,
    jin

  • Shayla Walker
    August 3, 2008
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    Lovely, simply lovely.


  • ShaShay
    August 3, 2008

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    Like the flow and vocabulary used here. You did yourself proud. I enjoyed this a lot and admire your rhyme meter. Pen on...~Poo~


  • Chanson belle
    August 3, 2008

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    wow good luck in the contest, i love the flow of this and the formatting makes it flow even better i really like this (:


  • PerVirtuous
    August 3, 2008
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    Very fluid language and meter. A very worthy entry in this contest.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 3, 2008
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  • The Grimm Poet
    August 3, 2008
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    This is a most excellent poem. Your vocabulary is impressive.

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