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The Ballad of Again

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Fallen to the dance
where entwined we once were
to be was, was never was
and I still yearned for his
               essence.

 

Peeking pokes upon the sky

as it picked another scab

heal me now! heal me soon!

before I bleed on his

          parade.

 

Yes, march lover, march!

leave this life to lead in vain

lost in liquid promises

seeping from your veins.

 

You can rip me from the inside

while purity's stains

           bleach my skin

one two three, one two three

as this dance breaks from dawn

to the broken ballerina I am.

 

As soon as we know

let it be known

I was the one to cuddle alone

in this grave of misconceptions

with memories of rotting grace.

 

Falter the line of lovers to hate

seek the Cinderella story of truth

she never made it to the ball.

 

Be it but a dream,

where bubbles are pricked

and suffocate the heart

with a plastic bag to save the

               shattered.

 

Please strike lightening once more

alight the fire of your putrid self

burn my soul! let me scream!

hear the pleas I plead to you

stay?

 

And you leave

for these tears are nothing to you

these scars are just floating embers

that leave wimpy charred marks

 that you'll wash away soon

 

Just remember to

let me wash away

                too.

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Brilliant

    You're talent shines brightly through out this poem. the feelings of sadness are powerful, I felt it with each word that I read. You have given her a voice, a very powerful, strong and loud one at that. I absolutely love this poem.

    the pain in which she feels, is a pain that I too have felt not so long ago.

    excellent take on the prompt and your poem is brilliant.

    good luck

    kat


  • peregrin
    August 4, 2008
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    Oh, it is sad!
    But it is a very great piece!
    I really like the flow of it!


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 4, 2008

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    A well thought out piece you've penned here. One to definitely be proud of. I found this piece to be moving and had me from the beginning. You presented a piece that digs into one's soul and refreshingly reminds us of being human again. Thank you for bringing this piece to life. May you do well in the contest.

    She-ra


  • vici377
    August 4, 2008

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    I was the one to cuddle alone

    in this grave of misconceptions

    with memories of rotting grace.

    such powerful metaphors...and vivid imagery..BRAVO..wow..love the dark and this is a masterpiece..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..although I suspect trophy..blessings..namaste..


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    A1

    This is an incredibly intricate poem. It is a poetical minuette. I enjoyed the way that you folded and refolded the words to create the desired effect.

    It is an awesome poem.

    Mike


  • Room without doors gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This is a dark poem with so much emotion. Really sad and deep. I liked a lot of the imagery especially:

    You can rip me from the inside
    while purity's stains
    bleach my skin

    I thought this was very poetic and one of the best poems I've read today. Your choice of language was excellent and the poem had great flow. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Eusebius
    August 4, 2008

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    bravo

    A poignant lover's lament, often couched in dark terms, very deftly done and just a tad mysterious in parts... bravo... bravo...

  • Ulimate
    August 4, 2008

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    *CLAP*

    I really like this part:

    As soon as we know
    let it be known
    I was the one to cuddle alone
    in this grave of misconceptions
    with memories of rotting grace.

    Well done my friend...


  • Riamh
    August 4, 2008
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    That's beautiful. Well expressed in beautiful words.


  • sgking123 gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    excellent

    You can rip me from the inside

    while purity's stains

    bleach my skin

    one two three, one two three

    as this dance breaks from dawn

    to the broken ballerina I am.

    beautiful words.Love them.You are so graphic and wonderous.Thanks for sharing.Please visit some of my poetry for comments and inspiration.


  • Unsigned gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    ~looks up the tree for Stephs dog~

    Good luck small one...


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 3, 2008
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    http://s290.photobucket.com/albums/ll272/Temptress41/Dark/?action=view¤t=616703989_l.jpg

    here is your link to your prompt. if you don't like it, let me know .. you have one more chance,.

    also you can enter one more time.

    kat

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