No more will I talk of love
forever we'll be apart
for I have given my words to Angels
and to the Devil I give my heart
A sacrifice I made this night
and in blood I sign this page
Take that knife away from here
leave me to my mental rage
Muted cries escape my lips
and scarlet stains the stone
love will never keep me safe
I am broken and weep alone
You said my words meant nothing
and walked away in the night
So I send my tongue after you
and in silence I continue my fight...
Author notes
Nice pic....
A contest entry
- Dark Picture Prompt Contest!! Big Points!!! by Sweet Impatience.
1350 points, ended August 14, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow! I know I am being redundant but I can't just help it. Your words strongly evokes the power of your emotions...and this one is painful as it is dark...described the photo very well.
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Wow Your words are so captivating for this picture! The anger, the hurt the loneliness. You have captured it all with in this amazing write! Congrats on the HM! however I think it is Gold worthy! Thanks for sharing. 
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Awesome!!
Wow, simply outstanding work!! Such deep sorrow, darkly penned. Full of emotions...stunning poem! Congrats on the HM? Hmm looks golden to me hun
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Your words captivate me, dear. Your rhyme is flawless, and this speaks of true anguish. Simple stunning.
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Ooooooo.....how very dark love!!!! So much was said in this dad. Nice work you have done here! Good luck
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~Kystal Angel
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I love this and the imagery with in the words it is a beautiful write.
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i thought i already commented here - sorry si si
this is a really strong write and fitting take for the pic, very well done with this, best of luck to you!
its filled with great imagery and strong emotion....bravo
Tasha
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this is powerful, the whole thing, a lot of poets here have one part stronger than the rest but in this the entire piece just sizzles, fantastic.
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GOOD
Great Imagery. Keep this up!
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Awesome bro! Gave me a subtle shiver thinking of the dark and broken place the mind can be!
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Love it! Great wording that goes well with that picture. I love the emotion, images and wording in this. And I really like how you have ended it.
best wishes in the contest
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A very emotional write. I could feel the pain all through it. Wonderful flow and meter. Good imagery and metaphors. Just simply a great write.
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Well I quite! lol. You did a great job brother.. This is really amazing.. I'm really shocked by how emotional this piece is.. I really loved it!! you did wonderfully!!! best of luck!! and I'd say I see gold on this piece lol..
Angel
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I like this poem it has intense emotion
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I have a new favorite! Love the pic and that first stanza just draws you in. It totally captured my attention.
No more will I talk of love
never will I mention my heart
for I have given my words to Angels
and to the Devil I give my heart
Genius!
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POWERFUL
This poem is exceptional. very strong, dark & powerful.
you brought this picture to life with your words. Wow, you did excellent with the prompt.
good luck in the contest
kat
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This is something that works for the picture,
but for you, I am here and always will be.
Love the flow for the poem, the words work great.
This does show the personal point of view for her.
Your Lady,
Riftkin
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My Dear Brother,
WOW!!! What a read this one is! You have grown sooo much in such a short time! This is amazing! I love it!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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wow! that poem really gave a voice to that picture. i don't even have words to describe it! I'm just awed by your writing. Good job!
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http://s290.photobucket.com/albums/ll272/Temptress41/Dark/?action=view¤t=0_urthesacrifice.jpg
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http://s290.photobucket.com/albums/ll272/Temptress41/Dark/?action=view¤t=nottobe.jpg
ok how about this one. this is the link to your prompt.
you get one more chance.. if you don't like it let me know..
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nope sorry Kat hit me with another...pwease....
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would you rather me give you dark love or something else.. its entirely up to you... cuz I could give you something really dark and gory if you prefer...
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something like the last one...that was cool and easily written
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okay I'll brb
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Lol.. good luck with that one!!! my hearts cold and hard as stone!! I don't go gooey
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have you finished the first one yet.....I did ages ago..
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yeah yeah I'm writing it now
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