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The Game

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I lie in the cool, clear water
in shallows beneath shadows -
by human eye, undetectable.

I wait, my sleek silvered body
barely mobile …

I wait … for him
I know he’ll come
we’ll play the game
the same as always


but … who’ll win?

The line, the fly, I bite,
the struggle for supremacy.

I’ll let him win this time

I give up the fight

he smiles as I flash,
just one last run
then …

he reels me in
triumphantly -

game over.

He loves me
holds me tenderly
and looks into my eyes
before he sets me free
to play the game

once more

 

but …

why does he kiss me
on each cheek?
 

 

 

 

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  • rbruce gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    I really like the situation here, both the fisherman and the fish participating in the 'game' willingly. I believe it is possible that such a thing could happen. Its a lovely poem and exercises the imagination. A lovely read.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Aww that's cute!! I'm glad the fish was let go too! Sounds like they both enjoy the game!

    Great poem Sue!


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Boffo!

    You are getting into the soul of this and for all I know you are closer to the soul of the trout than I get. One thing, though. The fish knows why I kiss.
    Just doesn't understand why she doesn't get a chance to return the gesture.


  • breedluv gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    "He loves me
    holds me tenderly
    and looks into my eyes
    before he sets me free
    to play the game
    once more"
    The story of predator and prey....except the prey is an active and willing participant. One has to wonder what enjoyment the prey gets from this "dance".
    Excellent write!


  • Amera gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Wow! This is really good! I'm not mush of a fisherman but I can feel the passion for the sport in this. I was so relieved to see the fish was let go. What a great idea for a poem.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    I have never been a fan of sport fishing - I practice catch-and-eat. Your metapor shows this activity in a new light. Great job.

    Mike


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    I thought you didn't do metaphor!

    Great writing both straight and on a number of other levels, T-riffic!


  • arafura gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Because he loves the game too... I'm glad the fisherman practices "catch and release". Such fish are too good to catch just once!

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