Beauty of night,
pure and unrestrained
childrens laughter haunts
the wind..
Words touch upon
deary lanes,
as waves embrace
sorrows breath..
Grey emotions
Damper loves rhythm,
lies flow into
Angel's hearts cage..
Screams of immortal fear
drift in summer winds
as future tears threaten
to fall like tinsel upon
earths floor..
A contest entry
- Dark Picture Prompt Contest!! Big Points!!! by Sweet Impatience.
1350 points, ended August 14, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow great piece, kinda dark and kinda haunting. i loved it. i'm sorry i've been so useless lately
i wish you all the best!
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A lot of comments and very, very good. How about a bit of polish by replacing the multiple "as" with some other word. It would really make a difference.
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This unfinished poem
has gotten more comments than most 'polished pieces' get. Yah, I did the same as everyone else. I snuck a peek to see what you're writing these days. I agree with the consensus, its got good potential.
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I'm not gonna read.. let me know when it's finished tho
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okay..i admit..i snuck a peek too.
your poetry is like chocolate....i just couldn't resist,
the sun was in my eyes, my shoes were too tight,
and YES>>>>>>>I PEEKED too!
I learn a lot from your writes, to keep those simile's
alive....
"as future tears threaten to fall...like tinsel upon
earths floor."
love it so far!
ears/Seattle well done!
peeker in Seattle!
oops...sorry..but not real sorry. This is a great
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Yeah Ive never been good with rules...Thats right...Im a bad boy
jk Excellant work so far.
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so I see..
well at least we got something incommon besides wearing matching strait jackets..Lol. Blah I don't much like it..lol
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hmm....~sighs~..
you always make me sleepy when I read your writing lately...it is just so relaxing..
Well done my most talented sister...
Simon
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Thats not cool!!!! I don't want to make you sleep.. icky I'm going to delete this!! it sucks if it makes you sleepy!
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I read it...and I loved it. Absolutely beautiful
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Lol.. why is it that everytime I put "not finished dont read" everyone just has to read it.lol. thanks I'm glad that you like it so far.. *hugs*
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k. I'll have a go at this
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Wonderful!! I'm sure that you will do great!!
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~looks for words and sees that Jet is asleep in the picture~
WAKE UP and WRITE Sis!!!!!
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Hey! I have 13 days to write this!! and I'm going to use them!!! and like you should be talking anyway!!! you'll probably take forever to write anyway!!
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ok so the race is on......BG, Poem and AN's and no cheating...on your marks, get ready.......
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You cheated!! you already have your background!!!
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http://media.photobucket.com/image/dark%20love/SammyGirl16/Dark/2373118vih2u38rjr.gif?o=150
here is the link to your prompt. if you don't like this one you know what to do right?
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Can I have another picture please
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so what did you want this time.. beautiful or love???
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whats the diff? Lol.
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hang on.. y are u giving me a hard time???? lol
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Because I'm your twin and thats what I'm supposed to do!! and I really don't know what the diff is..Lol.
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you know you can enter twice don't you??
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Sissy.. done, though it sucks!!!!!
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ish yesh but I may only be able to write once..Lol.
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